Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The images illustrate the college cafetaria before it was renovation and how it appears today.

Overall, serving area ( all food & drink) has been converted to hot meals. Staff dining rooms have been changed to take away food and coffee bar, while salad bar and recycling bins have been newly added to the buillding, and out door barbecue and outdoor seating have been newly introduced, however tables and chairs, toilest, and kitchen have been unchanged, and bin has been modernized to recycling bins.

Regarding the top left coner, kitchen area and serving area ( all food and drink), only change was serving area has been converted to hot meals, kitchen is remaining in the same place. In side the building, Salad bar has been introduced in the left side coner, and staff dining rooms and the furnituer have been removed and converted to take away food and coffee bar. Bin area has been expanded to the recycling buns. Tables and chairs, toilets area have not been changed during the renovation.

The below the map area, barbecue and outdoor seating facilicies has been introduced with the new seating arrangement with tables and chairs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the cafe redesign, including the conversion of the serving area, the addition of the salad bar, and the introduction of outdoor facilities. You have also correctly noted which areas remained unchanged. However, the response lacks a clear, cohesive overview paragraph; the summary is somewhat fragmented and repetitive. To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview clearly synthesises the most significant changes rather than listing them in a way that overlaps with the body paragraphs. The information is generally accurate, but the structure of the report could be more professional and concise to better highlight the comparative nature of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and a lack of sophisticated cohesive devices. For example, you use 'Regarding the top left corner' and 'In side the building' in a way that feels slightly disjointed. The use of linking words is somewhat mechanical, and the transition between the description of the interior and the exterior is abrupt. To improve, focus on using a wider range of cohesive devices (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') to connect your ideas more fluidly and avoid repeating the same information across different sections.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to describe the changes clearly. You use relevant terms such as 'renovation', 'converted', and 'modernized'. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'cafetaria', 'buillding', 'toilest', 'furnituer', and 'facilicies'. These errors are noticeable and detract from the overall quality of the writing. To achieve a higher score, you should aim for more precise vocabulary related to spatial description and ensure that your spelling is accurate. Avoid repeating the same phrases, such as 'have been introduced' or 'have been changed', by using synonyms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the flow of your writing. Issues include incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'before it was renovation'), subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'barbecue and outdoor seating facilicies has been introduced'), and missing articles. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. To improve, pay closer attention to tense consistency—specifically the use of the present perfect passive—and ensure that your subjects and verbs agree in number.

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