Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The plans compare the view of cafe bar in college before and after some changing.
Overall, the plans describe cafe before redesign, we enter the main door and first we saw the big hall which include tables and chairs on the main entrance and we saw small bin on the left side of entrance, But nowadays put changing in bin and create enhancement in bin and in previous plan we saw staff dining rooms for students on front of the entrance, but nowadays dining room replace into two room and make take away food and coffee bar. Next in previous plan we saw the right side entrance of the serving area there provide all food and drinks but now a days only provide hot meals also today build salad bar in the main hall where there place tables and chairs. In previous days, on the left side of the bin built a toilet and no changing in the toilet nowadays. But today on the backyard of cafe build up outdoor seating there students make barbecue and enjoy there.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies the main features of the cafe redesign, such as the addition of the salad bar and outdoor seating. However, the report lacks a clear overview or summary of the most significant changes. The description is somewhat repetitive and focuses on listing features rather than synthesizing the information. Some details, such as the 'bin' being mentioned multiple times, are not central to the task and distract from the main structural changes. To improve, you should group related features together (e.g., seating areas, service areas) and provide a more analytical summary of the transformation rather than a chronological or item-by-item list.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into two paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'in previous plan' and 'nowadays'. The flow between sentences is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two plans. Paragraphing is present but does not effectively separate the introduction, overview, and specific details. To improve, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'whereas', 'in contrast', 'subsequently') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, logical focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'saw', 'make', and 'place'. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'put changing in bin' and 'create enhancement in bin', which do not accurately describe the visual information. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the changes with precision. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more descriptive verbs and nouns related to architectural changes, such as 'transformed', 'relocated', 'expanded', or 'installed', and avoid repeating the same basic sentence structures.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with verb tense consistency (e.g., 'we saw', 'nowadays put changing'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, which hinders readability. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the existing sentences are often simple or incorrectly constructed. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions. Additionally, try to incorporate a mix of simple and complex sentences to demonstrate a better command of English grammar.
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