Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The information regarding the modifications have occurred in a college cafe in before redesigning and present has been depicted by the assigned two maps.

At the fleeting glance over the given maps, in the South direction, outdoor seating is newly added with the barbecue. Interestingly, two new entrance are built in the South direction, one door is near to toilets and other door is close to barbecue area. Bins are changed into recycling bins and the opposite direction of the bins, salad bar is buit.

Further scrutinizing and extracting the key features, in the North direction side are remained untouched. In the kitchen, serving areas are converted into hot meals. Surprisingly, staff dinning rooms were located in the heart of the cafe which is changed into coffee bar and take away food.

Overall, it is luminous that after modification of a coffee cafe which looks more attractive as adding more modern amenities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the two maps, including the addition of outdoor seating, the new entrances, and the internal layout changes. However, the overview is somewhat weak; it lacks a clear summary of the most significant changes, such as the transformation of the central area. The description of the 'North direction' being 'untouched' is accurate, but the report would benefit from a more structured comparison between the 'before' and 'after' states. While all parts of the task are addressed, the development of some points is slightly disjointed, preventing a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'At the fleeting glance' and 'Further scrutinizing and extracting'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when describing locations. While the progression of ideas is generally logical, the transition between the description of the exterior and the interior could be smoother. The overall structure is sufficient for a Band 6, but more varied and precise linking words would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'modifications have occurred in a college cafe in before redesigning' and 'it is luminous that'. The attempt to use more sophisticated vocabulary is evident, but it often results in unnatural collocations. There are also minor spelling errors like 'buit' instead of 'built' and 'dinning' instead of 'dining'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise terminology for describing spatial changes and ensuring word choices are natural in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('modifications have occurred... has been depicted') and incorrect preposition usage ('in the South direction'). Articles are also frequently misused or omitted. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of these errors limits the score. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralisation and article usage.

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