Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The diagram describe the college cafe before and after and what is the changing in this cafe after.
The main changing in the cafe adding the outdoor seating and remove the staff dining room today cafe,
In the past cafe design be simple.The kitchen located are same place and table and chairs are same place. staff dining room divided in to two part and staff dining room use for taken food and coffee bar.Now added the salad bar and barbecue area. Serving food and drink area change into the hot meals.In the past outdoor seating has no avialable but now adding the outdoor seating and modify the recycling bins. and the toilets located in the same place.today cafe have no staff room.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified some key features of the cafe redesign, such as the addition of the salad bar and outdoor seating, the summary is incomplete and lacks a clear overview. The description of the changes is fragmented and lacks the necessary detail to fully report the information provided in the plans. To improve, ensure you provide a clear introduction, a summary of the main trends, and detailed comparisons between the two diagrams, ensuring you meet the length requirement to allow for full development of your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear structure and logical progression. The ideas are presented in a disjointed manner, with very few cohesive devices used to link sentences or paragraphs. The text is essentially a single block of sentences rather than a well-organized report. To improve, you should group related information into distinct paragraphs—for example, one for the original layout and one for the changes. Use linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', 'furthermore', and 'subsequently' to guide the reader through the comparison of the two plans.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'change', 'place', and 'add'. There are also several errors in word choice and form, such as 'what is the changing' instead of 'what the changes are' and 'taken food' instead of 'dining'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the visual data with precision. To improve, focus on learning specific terminology for describing diagrams, such as 'relocated', 'transformed', 'expanded', and 'converted', and ensure you use the correct parts of speech.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The diagram describe'), missing articles ('in the past cafe design'), and incorrect sentence structures ('In the past outdoor seating has no avialable'). The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, specifically the use of 'there is/are', correct verb tenses for describing past and present states, and the proper use of articles and prepositions.
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