Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The photo shown in above is elobrating the difference between a Cafe's old design and the new one. There are quite differences in both of designs.
Cafe today (after redesign) is looking much better and well-planned as compared to before the redesigning.
We start from kitchen area which is similar there is no difference as show in picture.
Serving area (all food & Drink) is replaced with Hot Meals after the redesign.
Today's Cafe with a Salad Bar is quite attractive for students who are vegen. This difference has an impact in current design.
Outside of the Cafe there is a Barbecue spot there, with additional seatings for outside costumers and the addition of this spot in cafe may cause of more traffic at cafe which is quite good.
The staff dining rooms are replaced with take away food room and coffee bar which are additionaly sounds good for the cafe's reputation. The bin is redesigned and now it is converted with Recycling bin which may help to control the pollution and encourge the process of recycling of waste in cafe.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies the main changes, such as the addition of the salad bar and the barbecue area. However, the report lacks a clear overview or summary of the most significant changes, which is a requirement for Band 6 and above. The analysis is somewhat superficial, focusing on individual items rather than synthesizing the information. For example, the description of the kitchen area as 'similar' is vague, and the commentary on the cafe's 'reputation' is subjective rather than objective reporting. To improve, focus on grouping features logically and providing a clear summary of the overall transformation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into short, somewhat disjointed paragraphs. While there is a logical progression from the kitchen to the outside area, the use of cohesive devices is limited and occasionally mechanical. Phrases like 'We start from' are informal and not suitable for an Academic Task 1 report. Furthermore, the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'This difference has an impact in current design,' which lacks a clear antecedent. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'elobrating' (elaborating), 'vegen' (vegan), and 'additionaly sounds good'. The use of 'costumers' instead of 'customers' is a spelling error that affects the professional tone. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to describing changes, such as 'converted into,' 'relocated,' or 'expanded,' rather than relying on basic verbs like 'replaced' or 'is'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Issues include incorrect article usage ('The photo shown in above'), subject-verb agreement errors ('There are quite differences'), and awkward sentence structures ('the addition of this spot in cafe may cause of more traffic'). There is a limited range of complex structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct use of prepositions, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles or incorrect verb forms.
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