Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The plans below show a college cafe belong it was redesigned and it look now. so we can see the cafe before redesign designed on the page. He show that the kitchen is near to the serving area like in the place were we stored the food and drinks. However, there is a large room down side to the Kitchen area. That have staff dining rooms and outside we have tables and chairs for people to take rest. Also we got toilet room for the peoples. And useless things people can through to the right side of the wall. That is the before cafe redesign.

Cafe today chat you can see the up side kitchen and in that room we also see the hot meals. on the other hand we see a large room that have take away food and also coffee bar. In that room the new collective things is that we also see the salad bar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to provide a clear overview of the main changes, which is a requirement for Task 1. The description is fragmented and lacks a professional, analytical tone. While you mention some features like the kitchen and the coffee bar, the information is not organised into a logical summary. You have not made effective comparisons between the 'before' and 'after' states, instead listing features in a disjointed manner. To improve, you must identify the most significant changes—such as the expansion of the seating area or the addition of new facilities—and present them in a structured, comparative way rather than simply listing items found in the diagrams.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organisation of the response is weak. There is no clear paragraph structure, and the transition between the 'before' and 'after' descriptions is abrupt. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often misused, such as the repetitive use of 'and' and 'also' to link ideas. The referencing is unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial layout of the cafe. To improve, you should use clear paragraphing—one for the introduction/overview and one or two for the detailed comparisons—and employ a wider range of linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', and 'subsequently' to guide the reader through the information.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple words like 'things', 'room', and 'place'. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'belong' instead of 'before', 'through' instead of 'throw', and 'collective things' which is unclear. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the features of a floor plan accurately. To improve, you should learn specific vocabulary related to describing changes, such as 'relocated', 'expanded', 'converted', or 'installed', and focus on using precise nouns to describe the different areas of the cafe rather than generic terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with verb tense consistency (e.g., 'it look now'), subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'He show'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or poorly constructed, such as 'That have staff dining rooms'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent. To improve, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice using correct tenses when describing past and present states. Proofreading for simple errors like 'peoples' (should be 'people') is also essential.

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