Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The sets of graph depicts the information about renovation plan of cafeteria before and after refurbished of a academic institution.
In past time before refurbishment the map was very spacious and very few facilities. There were staff dining room is allocated for tutors and professors at the center part of the map. Toilets were situated at the south eastern corner and next to this a bin is located at the eastern side. Serving area and kitchen were at the north western corner. Tables and chairs were arranged beside the staff dining room.
Cafe looked very well maintained and designed after renovation. Hot meals , salad bar, coffee bar, take away food were newly introduced. Recycling bins were located at the same place but change the number of beans. Barbeque area was newly added outside the building. Salad bar was added at the south side of the plan. One new entrance was added next to the toilet.
Overall, design of past cafe are is not very well designed but after renovation it was provided many amenities and expanded outside the building.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the cafe renovation, including the addition of new facilities like the salad bar and barbeque area. However, the overview is somewhat weak and lacks a clear summary of the most significant changes, such as the expansion of the seating area and the overall increase in capacity. While the key features are identified, the description of the 'before' state is a bit repetitive, and some comparisons between the two plans could be more explicit. To improve, ensure the overview highlights the most striking transformations rather than just listing individual additions.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, moving from an introduction to the 'before' state, the 'after' state, and a brief conclusion. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. Transitions between sentences are often abrupt, and there is a lack of sophisticated linking words to connect the changes described. For example, the transition between the description of the old layout and the new one could be smoother. Improving the variety of cohesive devices would help the flow of ideas significantly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the reader to understand the changes made to the cafe. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and minor errors, such as 'refurbished of a academic institution' (should be 'refurbishment of an academic institution') and 'change the number of beans' (likely meant 'bins'). The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited and relies on basic descriptors. Incorporating more precise terminology related to architectural changes or spatial layout would enhance the quality of the writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'The sets of graph depicts' (subject-verb agreement error), 'In past time' (missing article), and 'design of past cafe are is' (redundant verb usage). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles would lead to more accurate and professional-sounding sentences.
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