Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Th se two plans show the major difference in cafe before redesign. In cafe before redesign there was a kitchen and serving area is located near door where all food and drinks are available.

By entering into the door we saw tables and chairs and there are two staff dining rooms. Bin is available near toilets.

Now, lets have a look after redesigning of cafe. Where was serving area in old cafe now at the same location there is hot meal available and it's also near to door. Kitchen is available at the same place when we enter through the door in front of or there salad bar and also we can find tables and chairs.

There is a difference now we do not have staff dining room as we were having in our old cafe in the replacement of staff dining room we have take away food counter and coffee bar these both rooms have different doors. Recycling bins are available at the same place where it was in old cafe in front of toilets but now we have a upgradation of cafe and we have outdoor seating as well where peoples can enjoy barbecue which is east side of outdoor seating. So we have more space and and more facilities in our new cafe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response outlines the major differences between the old and redesigned cafe, fulfilling the task requirements. However, it lacks a systematic comparison of features, which weakens the clarity significantly. The mention of staff dining rooms and their replacement with a takeaway counter could be expanded for better context. The organization of information is somewhat disjointed, affecting the overall task achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The coherence is lacking due to abrupt shifts between describing the old and new cafe without clear transitions. For example, the phrase "Now, lets have a look after redesigning of cafe" does not flow smoothly from the previous ideas. More connective phrases could help guide the reader through the transformation, making comparisons clearer and enhancing overall structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive (e.g., using "cafe" multiple times without variation), which affects the lexical resource score. Phrases such as "take away food counter" and "coffee bar" are appropriate but could be improved with higher-level vocabulary, like "grab-and-go counter." The usage of phrases like "upgradation of cafe" feels awkward and may cause confusion. More varied vocabulary would strengthen the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammatical range is limited, primarily using simple sentence structures with notable errors, such as "Th se two plans show" and "where peoples can enjoy barbecue." The confusion between singular and plural ("peoples") affects clarity. While there are some complex sentences, they are occasionally fragmented. A greater variety in sentence structure and improved accuracy would elevate the score significantly.

Overall feedback

Your response identifies key features of the cafe redesign, which is excellent for task achievement. To improve, focus on enhancing coherence by using clearer transitions and outlining the differences more systematically. Expand your vocabulary with more varied terms and phrases to avoid repetition and awkward word choices. Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and aim to use a wider range of sentence structures. Proofreading to correct minor typographical errors, such as "Th se" and "lets," would also help improve the overall presentation of your work.

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