Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
To illustrate following both diagrams of a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks like now. Firstly we make the report of cafe before redesigned. Kitchen and serving area (all food and drink) are on the left side of staff dining rooms. The hall contains tables and chairs as well as Toilets are in the corner and a store for recyclebin bottom the staff diningn room
Secondly ellaborate the cafe today kitchen and serving area are same but take away food and cofeebar are replaced on the staffrooms.
Furthermore a salad bar also add in the hall toilets and recycling bins are same. On the other hand barbecue contains in the bottom of salad bar and now outdoor seatings also included.
To some up now today cafe have many changings like the old cafe. In todays cafe some addition also occure as well as somthings are same as the old.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to describe the changes between the two cafe plans, but it fails to provide a clear overview or a logical summary of the main features. While some details are mentioned, such as the kitchen and the addition of a salad bar, the description is fragmented and lacks a professional tone. The information is not presented in a way that allows the reader to easily visualize the changes. The response lacks a clear introduction and a cohesive summary of the key trends or significant transformations, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher in Academic Task 1.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the awkward transitions 'To illustrate following' and 'To some up now today'. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult to follow the spatial relationships between the different areas of the cafe. The structure feels disjointed, and the lack of clear signposting between the 'before' and 'after' states hinders the overall flow of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are several spelling errors, such as 'cofeebar', 'ellaborate', 'somthings', and 'occure'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the spatial changes effectively, relying on basic verbs like 'add' or 'replaced'. There is little evidence of the precise, academic vocabulary required for describing diagrams, such as 'relocated', 'expanded', 'converted', or 'partitioned'. The word choice is often informal and imprecise, which limits the ability to convey information clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There are issues with sentence structure, such as 'Kitchen and serving area... are on the left side of staff dining rooms' (missing articles) and 'barbecue contains in the bottom of salad bar' (incorrect verb usage). Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences and missing commas. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors in subject-verb agreement and prepositional usage. Complex structures are largely absent or incorrectly formed.
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