Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given image illustrates the cafeteria of a college prior and afterwards a redevelopment.
Overall, the staff dining room changed into take away and coffee room with addition of outside seating in south cafeteria. Tables and chairs, toilets, salad bar and recycling bin on same place.
Before construction, two circular tables on the top north of Cafe designated for staff. Toilet was lies at south-west of building. Bin was situated next to entrance of construction. Kitchen and serving was at west-north corner while tables and chairs was situated at center of Cafe of college.
After reconstruction, there was no much re-settings. Kitchen remained at it's original place and serving area changed into hot meals. Major change is staff dining changed into take away and coffee bar. There is a new addition of salad bar in settings area of Cafe and toilet remained at same place. A significant new redevelopment is addition of outside seating area with Barbecue.
So, cafe went through crucial additions of outside dining and introduction of salad bar while recycling and kitchen area at same places and re-arrangement of staff dining room to take away and coffee bar.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the cafe redesign, including the transformation of the staff dining room and the addition of the outside seating area. You successfully identified key changes and provided a clear overview. However, the report lacks precision in describing the spatial relationships. For instance, stating 'Toilet was lies at south-west' is grammatically awkward and imprecise. Additionally, while you mention the salad bar, you could have provided more detail on its specific location relative to the original layout to better satisfy the 'comparisons where relevant' requirement. The summary is generally accurate, but a more analytical approach to the spatial changes would improve the score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, moving from an overview to specific details of the 'before' and 'after' states. The use of transition signals like 'Before construction' and 'After reconstruction' helps the reader follow the timeline. However, the cohesion is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'Bin was situated next to entrance of construction.' The final paragraph is somewhat repetitive, restating information already provided in the body. Improving the flow between sentences by using a wider variety of cohesive devices would enhance the overall structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to describe the layout changes clearly. You use relevant terms like 'redevelopment,' 'reconstruction,' and 'seating area.' However, there are instances of awkward word choices and minor errors, such as 'no much re-settings' and 'at it's original place' (a punctuation error). To reach a higher band, you should aim for more precise collocations and a wider range of vocabulary to describe spatial changes, such as 'relocated,' 'expanded,' or 'transformed,' rather than relying on simpler phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the quality of the writing. Common issues include missing articles (e.g., 'at center of Cafe'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'Toilet was lies'), and subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'tables and chairs was situated'). These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding the information. To improve, focus on consistent use of articles and ensuring that subjects and verbs agree in number.
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