Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The provided pictures shows us the architectural view of the college canteen before and after of its reconstruction.

Overall, the area occupied by the canteen is still the same. Inside the Cafe , it is redesigned like some of the serving area are still having their place but many new area like salad bar at the mid of left wall, barbecue area is built at outside of the Cafe but parallel to salad bar and many other options are introduced.

Firstly, the Kitchen area is on the same place. The previous area located for serving area in now converted into Hot meals. Then outside of kitchen's door there was a huge dinning hall, had chairs and tables, remain same but the salad Bar is launch at the left side of Canteen wall. The Staff dining Rooms is now redesign and converted into Take away food and Coffee bar.

Continue with the Refreshment Rooms and Recycling areas, they are never rebuilt. New advanced areas are invented at the outer side of canteen which is outdoor seating and BBQ area which is along with the side of salad bar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the task by identifying the main features of the cafe redesign. You successfully highlight key changes, such as the introduction of the salad bar and the conversion of the staff dining room. However, the report lacks a clear, analytical overview. While you mention the area remains the same, the summary could be more effective by grouping features more logically (e.g., internal vs. external changes). Some descriptions are slightly inaccurate, such as stating the kitchen is in the 'same place' when the layout has clearly shifted. To improve, ensure you provide a more precise comparison of the spatial changes rather than just listing features.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the logical progression is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For instance, the phrase 'Continue with the Refreshment Rooms' is an unnatural way to start a paragraph. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly' and 'Overall', the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'they are never rebuilt', which makes it difficult to identify exactly which areas you are referring to. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'architectural view', 'reconstruction', and 'parallel'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'salad Bar is launch' (should be 'launched') and 'areas are invented' (should be 'introduced' or 'added'). Additionally, there are minor errors in word formation, such as 'dinning hall' (should be 'dining hall'). To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology for describing spatial changes and ensure that your word choices are contextually appropriate for a formal report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('The provided pictures shows') and incorrect preposition use ('at the mid of left wall'). There are also errors with articles and tense consistency, such as 'previous area located for serving area in now converted'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and article usage will significantly improve your accuracy.

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