Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
According to chat you can see now that the cafe before the redesign how looks and after it is and how look let us take at the proper preview.
So first of all is a talk about the cafe before redesign there are there are three section in a cafe there is kitchen serving areas staff designing hall tables and chess and toilets and dustbin it very common to seen in each and every types of cafe but the cafe will be read design and the new plant will be there there are kitchen there another kitchen for the Hotmail and kitchens for marriage you there are so many there are two bars one of the one is the take a food and one is the coffee bar so if I wanted to drink a coffee and now there is a outdoor sitting also which you can see in your chat and barbecues there is a different side of barbecue Tandon type of a meals there are washrooms availables more setting areas more cleanliness awareness is available so this is the chat preview
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to provide a clear overview or a structured comparison of the two plans. Instead of identifying key changes (such as the expansion of the kitchen, the addition of outdoor seating, or the relocation of facilities), the text relies on a stream-of-consciousness description that is often inaccurate or irrelevant (e.g., mentioning 'marriage' or 'Hotmail' kitchens, which are not present in the source material). The information is not logically selected or reported, and the lack of a clear summary means the main features are not effectively highlighted. The response does not meet the requirements for a formal academic report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks paragraphing and logical progression. It reads as a single, rambling block of text with no clear transition between the 'before' and 'after' states. Cohesive devices are either absent or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'there are' and 'there is' to list items. The referencing is unclear, and the overall structure is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two diagrams.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. The student uses informal, conversational fillers like 'let us take at the proper preview' and 'you can see in your chat'. There are significant errors in word choice, such as 'chess' instead of 'chairs' and 'dustbin' used in a way that does not fit the context. The range is insufficient to describe the visual data accurately, and the misuse of terms hinders communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. There is a lack of sentence control, with many run-on sentences and fragments. Basic structures are often faulty, such as 'the cafe before the redesign how looks' and 'there are three section'. Punctuation is almost entirely absent, and there is no attempt at complex sentence structures. The high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read and understand.
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