Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the given maps illustrates that, plans of college cafe before it was redesingned and its present look.
it can be observed that , in kitchen area the area which were used for serving is now being used for hot meals and two dining room for staff are now redesign to take away food and coffee bar.
furthermore it can be observed that , design of toilet and indoor table and chair were not changed. after desinging new for salad bar and outdoor table and chair were constructed. in east direction recycyling bin remain same and a seperate space fpr barbacue is build outside the cafe . the cafe look is amamzing now to attract more costumer
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified some key features of the cafe redesign, such as the changes in the kitchen and the addition of outdoor seating, the report is underdeveloped. You have missed several details from the plans and failed to provide a clear overview or summary of the main trends. The inclusion of subjective commentary, such as 'the cafe look is amazing now to attract more costumer', is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report, which requires an objective summary of the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into very short paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. You use basic cohesive devices like 'furthermore' and 'it can be observed that', but these are repetitive and do not always connect ideas effectively. The lack of a clear structure makes the report feel like a list of observations rather than a cohesive summary. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall arrangement of information lacks the necessary flow expected in a formal report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms such as 'area', 'changed', and 'look'. There are several spelling errors, such as 'redesingned', 'desinging', 'recycyling', 'fpr', 'barbacue', and 'costumer', which hinder the readability of the text. To improve, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to describing changes, such as 'transformed', 'converted', 'relocated', or 'expanded', and ensure that your spelling is accurate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammatical range is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentence structures. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'the given maps illustrates', 'two dining room', and 'a seperate space fpr barbacue is build'. These errors are persistent and sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring that your verbs are correctly conjugated and that plural/singular forms are used consistently.
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