Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The two maps illustrate the changes that have taken place in cafe between cafe before redesign and cafe today.

Overall, it is clear that cafe has undergone considerable development, with several new salad bar being constructed, while staff dining rooms has been removed.

In cafe before redesign, cafe comprised kitchen, bin and serving area, situated alongside staff dining rooms. The southern of the site was largely occupied by toilets.

By cafe today, significant transformations are evident. staff dining rooms has been replaced by take away food and coffee bar, while a new salad bar has been constructed adjacent to southwest. Meanwhile, kitchen remains in roughly the same location as before.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

Javobingiz 150 ta so'zdan iborat bo'lishi kerak bo'lgan minimal talabga javob bermaydi, bu esa topshiriqning bajarilishiga sezilarli ta'sir qiladi. Garchi siz kafelarni qayta loyihalashning asosiy xususiyatlarini aniqlagan bo'lsangiz ham, tasvir juda qisqa va Academic Task 1 talablarini to'liq qondirish uchun zarur bo'lgan tafsilotlarga ega emas. O'tirish joylari yoki yangi xususiyatlarning aniq joylashuvi kabi muhim jihatlar yetarlicha chuqur tasvirlanmagan. Yaxshilash uchun tahlilingizni yanada aniqroq taqqoslashlar bilan kengaytirishingiz va diagrammalarda taqdim etilgan ma'lumotlarni to'liq yoritish uchun javobingiz belgilangan hajm talabiga javob berishini ta'minlashingiz kerak.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

Javobingiz mantiqiy paragraflarga bo'lingan, bu esa o'quvchiga 'before' holatidan 'after' holatiga o'tishni kuzatib borishga yordam beradi. Biroq, bog'lovchi vositalardan foydalanish biroz mexanik va cheklangan. Masalan, gaplar o'rtasidagi bog'liqlik ko'pincha oddiy tuzilmalarga tayanadi. Havolalar ba'zan noaniq, masalan, 'adjacent to southwest' iborasi aniq otga havola qilinmagan. Yaxshilash uchun bog'lovchi so'zlarning kengroq doirasidan foydalanishga harakat qiling va har bir joy yoki xususiyatga qilingan havola aniq va grammatik jihatdan to'liq bo'lishiga ishonch hosil qiling.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Ishlatilgan lug'at topshiriq uchun yetarli, ammo juda oddiy va takrorlanuvchan. Siz 'cafe' va 'redesign' so'zlarini ko'p marta, deyarli o'zgarishsiz ishlatasiz. Shuningdek, so'z tanlash va kollokatsiyalar bilan bog'liq ba'zi muammolar mavjud, masalan, 'staff dining rooms has been removed' (bu yerda ko'plik shakli mos kelishi kerak) va 'the southern of the site' (bu yerda 'the southern part' yoki 'the south' bo'lishi kerak). Yuqoriroq band balliga erishish uchun fazoviy joylashuv va o'zgarishlarga oid aniqroq tasviriy so'zlarni, masalan, 'relocated', 'expanded' yoki 'transformed' kabilarni qo'shishingiz kerak.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

Javobingiz oddiy va ba'zi murakkab gap tuzilmalarining aralashmasidan iborat, ammo matn oqimiga ta'sir qiluvchi tez-tez uchraydigan grammatik xatolar mavjud. Xususan, artikllar (masalan, 'in cafe before redesign' o'rniga 'in the cafe before the redesign') va ega-kesim mosligi (masalan, 'staff dining rooms has been replaced') bilan bog'liq doimiy muammolar bor. Bu xatolar matn davomida yaqqol ko'zga tashlanadi. Yaxshilash uchun aniq va noaniq artikllardan foydalanishni mukammal o'zlashtirishga e'tibor qarating hamda ega va kesimning son jihatidan mos kelishini ta'minlang. Ushbu oddiy xatolarni tekshirib chiqish ballingizni oshirishga yordam beradi.

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