Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The two maps illustrate the changes that have taken place in the cafe between the cafe before redesign and the cafe today.
Overall, it is clear that the cafe has undergone considerable development, with several new salad bars being constructed, while the staff dining rooms have been removed.
In the cafe before redesign, the cafe comprised a kitchen, bin and a serving area, situated alongside the staff dining rooms. The southern part of the site was largely occupied by toilets.
By the cafe today, significant transformations are evident. The staff dining rooms have been replaced by a take-away food and coffee bar, while a new salad bar has been constructed adjacent to the southwest. Meanwhile, the kitchen remains in roughly the same location as before.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
Javobingiz 150 ta so'zdan iborat bo'lishi kerak bo'lgan minimal talabga javob bermaydi, bu esa topshiriqni bajarish (task achievement) baliga sezilarli ta'sir qiladi. Siz kafelarni qayta loyihalashning asosiy xususiyatlarini aniqlagan bo'lsangiz-da, hisobotning qisqaligi ba'zi jihatlarning yetarlicha yoritilmaganini anglatadi. Masalan, oshxona o'z joyida qolganini aytib o'tgansiz, ammo o'zgarishlarni yaxshiroq ko'rsatish uchun o'tirish joyi yoki stollar va stullarning joylashuvi haqida batafsilroq ma'lumot berishingiz mumkin edi. Yaxshilash uchun vizual ma'lumotlarning barcha nuqtalari bo'yicha kengroq sharh berib, so'zlar soni talabini qondirishingiz va o'zgarishlar haqida yanada mukammal xulosa chiqarishingiz kerak.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
Javobingiz mantiqiy jihatdan aniq kirish, umumiy sharh va o'zgarishlarni batafsil yorituvchi asosiy qismlar bilan tashkil etilgan. O'quvchini ma'lumotlar bo'ylab yo'naltirish uchun 'Overall', 'In the cafe before redesign' va 'Meanwhile' kabi bog'lovchi vositalardan foydalangansiz. Biroq, xatboshilarga ajratish biroz mexanik ko'rinadi va umumiy sharh bilan asosiy qismlar o'rtasidagi o'tish yanada ravonroq bo'lishi mumkin edi. Fikrlarning rivojlanishi odatda aniq, ammo qisqaligi sababli chuqurlik yetishmaydi, bu esa umumiy tuzilmani biroz rivojlanmagandek ko'rsatadi. Yaxshilash uchun jumlalar va g'oyalar o'rtasida yanada murakkab bog'lanishlarga imkon beradigan tavsiflaringizni kengaytirishga e'tibor qarating.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Siz topshiriq uchun yetarli darajada lug'at boyligini namoyish etasiz, masalan, 'considerable development', 'transformations' va 'adjacent' kabi atamalardan foydalangansiz. Bu so'zlar aniq ishlatilgan va o'zgarishlarni samarali yetkazishga yordam beradi. Biroq, matn davomida 'cafe' so'zi takrorlanib qolgan. Yuqoriroq band olish uchun sinonimlarning kengroq doirasidan va fazoviy o'zgarishlarni tasvirlash uchun 'relocated', 'expanded' yoki 'reconfigured' kabi aniqroq kollokatsiyalardan foydalanishga intilishingiz kerak. Hozirgi lug'at boyligingiz topshiriq uchun yetarli, ammo yuqori bandlar uchun zarur bo'lgan moslashuvchanlik va murakkablik yetishmaydi.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
Javobingiz 'The staff dining rooms have been replaced by a take-away food and coffee bar, while a new salad bar has been constructed' kabi sodda va murakkab gap tuzilmalarining aralashmasini o'z ichiga oladi. Grammatik xatolar juda kam va tinish belgilari odatda to'g'ri qo'yilgan. Biroq, tuzilmalar doirasi biroz cheklangan. Yaxshilash uchun o'zgarishlarni yanada ravon tasvirlash maqsadida majhul nisbat (passive voice) yoki ergash gaplar (relative clauses) kabi murakkabroq grammatik shakllarni ko'proq qo'llashga harakat qiling. Hozirgi aniqlik darajangiz yaxshi, ammo gap tuzilmalaringizning murakkabligini oshirish yuqoriroq darajadagi nazoratni namoyish etishga yordam beradi.
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