Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The plans discribe a college cafe before it was or redesigned how it looks now well change very different kind of them
Overviews these plans well change a new build construction many type of category can use and invest most of income on recend years and proper change that
They was recent years well digined a fas home kitchen and second main serving areas all kind foof and drink can stay and use quickly in these home any time of day and mad of them staffduring room can provide rest after long time work can fell relax and easy so one place will be tables and chars to go some relative visit your home can used a eat food drink and talk to them a one place very easy one said home bin and toliets well build
on these other hand they new in these time well looked that kitchen same plac food area change hot meals and staff room well change on take away food or coffee bar tables and chairs same place and toliets and bin well same thing while one thinh aid said bar can use a friend saperat in home and back side outdoor seating place an barbecube area build
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the changes in the cafe, but it fails to provide a clear summary of the main features. The description is highly confusing and lacks a logical structure, making it difficult to identify the key transformations (e.g., the addition of the outdoor seating area or the relocation of the kitchen). The information provided is often inaccurate or irrelevant, such as referring to the college cafe as a 'home kitchen' or 'home'. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, as the reader cannot gain a clear understanding of the visual data provided in the plans.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks a coherent structure. There is no clear paragraphing, and the sentences are strung together without logical progression or appropriate cohesive devices. The use of linking words is almost non-existent, and where they are attempted, they are used incorrectly (e.g., 'on these other hand'). The lack of clear referencing makes it difficult to follow which part of the cafe is being discussed. The overall arrangement of information is chaotic, which severely hinders the reader's ability to follow the description of the changes.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is extremely limited and often inappropriate for an academic task. There are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'discribe', 'digined', 'foof', 'toliets', 'saperat', 'barbecube') and word choice errors that impede communication. The student relies on basic, repetitive language and fails to use specific terminology related to describing maps or plans, such as 'relocated', 'extended', 'converted', or 'installed'. The lexical range is insufficient to convey the information accurately, and the errors frequently cause confusion for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that distort meaning. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structure, with many sentences being fragments or run-on sentences (e.g., 'They was recent years well digined a fas home kitchen'). Subject-verb agreement is consistently incorrect, and there is an absence of complex structures. Punctuation is largely ignored, which further complicates the reading process. The errors are pervasive and occur in almost every sentence, making it very difficult to understand the intended message.
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