Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given picture depicts the alterations in a college cafe before redesigned and nowadays.
Looking from an overall perspective , it is readily apparent that the area of kitchen and toilets remain unchanged and the new commercial sites are developed, also increase the outdoor seating for costumers.
To commence with , the kitchen area remains same after redesigning and the serving place ,where all the food and drinks served replaced to hot meals . Moreover, new salad bar is designed in a cafe in the western side . In addition, the two staff dinning rooms ,which were available for staff members are now modified to take away food and coffee bar .
Moving towards , before redesigned there was a small bin in the east corner , that is replaced to recycling bins . furthermore , fresh barbecue is added infront of a cafe near to the main door . Additionally , newly tables and chairs are available outside the cafe for more costumers . lastly , toilets has been remained untouched .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the cafe redesign, such as the kitchen, seating areas, and the addition of new facilities like the salad bar and barbecue. You successfully identified what remained unchanged and what was modified. However, the report lacks a clear, analytical overview of the most significant changes. To reach a higher band, ensure your summary highlights the transformation of the space more effectively, perhaps by grouping the changes into themes (e.g., service areas vs. seating). While you addressed the task, the description of the 'serving place' being replaced by 'hot meals' is slightly inaccurate based on the visual data, as it refers to the function of the counter rather than the food itself.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of the description. You use some cohesive devices like 'To commence with', 'Moreover', and 'Moving towards' to link ideas. However, some of these transitions are used mechanically or are slightly unnatural, such as 'Moving towards' at the start of a paragraph. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear; for example, 'that is replaced to recycling bins' lacks a clear antecedent. Improving the variety and natural flow of your linking words will help create a more cohesive response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the changes, using terms like 'alterations', 'modified', and 'untouched'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'commercial sites are developed' (likely meaning 'facilities were added') and 'newly tables' (should be 'new tables'). The word 'costumers' is used twice, which is a spelling error for 'customers'. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for describing floor plans and ensure you check for common spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. For example, 'before redesigned' should be 'before it was redesigned', and 'toilets has been remained' is grammatically incorrect. There are also issues with article usage and prepositions, such as 'in a cafe' instead of 'in the cafe'. These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points of your report.
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