Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This diagram illustrate information recent cafe and before cafe. this diagram consist on two part on part is belong to past and second belong to new diagram. furthermore, old cafe have limited resources or limited areas one kitchen at the corner left side.at the front of kitchen serving area is situated two dining area is available setting area is also at the front of Cafe . their is some toilets at the corner of cafe for audience and a bin area where people use waste things in baskets.
on the other hand, today the cafe owner change the whole setup of cafe.they divided cafe in many parts and make the cafe more impressive. moreover, they change cafe style new chaning involved in cafe is salad bar, barbecue, takeaway food, coffee bar, recyclying bins, outdoor setting, so on chaning at cafe in today we see. in today they change staff and dinning room in takeaway food or coffee bar. new change is salad bar and barbecue palce is seprate from kitchen. hot meal is prepare at seprate place from kitchen. they choose some outdoor seating at cafe because people prefer to set under sky at night.
in conclusion, this two picture show the value of cafe and its changing in past or future.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to describe the changes in the cafe, but it fails to provide a clear overview or a logical summary of the main features. The description is fragmented and lacks a professional tone. While the student identifies some changes, such as the salad bar and outdoor seating, the information is presented in a disorganized manner. The conclusion is inaccurate, as it mentions 'future' changes, which are not present in the prompt. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant transformations and grouping them logically rather than listing details randomly.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal flow is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'furthermore' and 'on the other hand', which do not always logically connect the ideas. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the 'before' and 'after' states. The progression of ideas is not smooth, and the lack of clear topic sentences makes the structure feel disjointed. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'waste things in baskets' instead of 'recycling bins' or 'waste disposal area'. The student relies on basic, informal language that is not appropriate for an academic report. There are also several spelling errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'new chaning involved in cafe'. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on using more precise, topic-specific vocabulary related to floor plans and spatial descriptions, and work on accurate word formation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'This diagram illustrate', 'old cafe have'), missing articles, and incorrect tense usage. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in grammatical inaccuracies. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and incorrect capitalization. To improve, the student needs to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects and that articles are used correctly.
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