Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The structure presented below shows a college cafe which was remoderalised it previously and how attract it is present . There are two path ways one is cafe before redesign and another one is cafe today
Overall, in the cafe before redesign and cafe today there are few places which is common for both are kitchen, toilets, bin, and tables and chairs
Firstly in the cafe before redesign there is kitchen which is above the serving area for all food and drink, staff dining rooms above the tables and chairs to sit, bin to throw the waste age and atlast toilets to use and also there is an entrance beside bin
In the cafe today there is also kitchen and below that there is hot meals , it has take away food option beside that it has coffee bar where everyone can chill below these two it has tables and chairs to sit at the corner it has salad bar and opposite to that it has recycling bin and beside it there is an entrance and down of bin there is toilets to use ,also there is a barbecue with outdoor seating to enjoy the moment
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to describe the changes in the cafe, but it fails to provide a clear, analytical overview. While it identifies some features, the description is fragmented and lacks a professional tone. The summary of the 'main features' is weak, as it focuses on listing items rather than highlighting significant structural changes or spatial reorganisation. The comparison between the two plans is superficial, and the lack of a clear overview paragraph means the response does not meet the requirements for a high-level summary. To improve, focus on grouping information logically (e.g., structural changes vs. new facilities) and providing a concise summary of the most notable transformations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'in the cafe before redesign' and 'in the cafe today'. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the spatial descriptions are disjointed and lack clear referencing. For example, phrases like 'down of bin' are confusing and do not effectively guide the reader through the layout of the cafe. Improved use of linking words (e.g., 'whereas', 'in contrast', 'subsequently') and better paragraph transitions are needed to improve the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. There are several instances of non-standard word choices, such as 'remoderalised' (likely meant 'remodeled') and 'attract' (used incorrectly as a noun). The range of vocabulary is limited to simple nouns and verbs, which restricts the ability to describe the changes with precision. To achieve a higher band, you should incorporate more precise terminology related to spatial descriptions, such as 'relocated', 'expanded', 'transformed', or 'adjacent to'. The current vocabulary is just enough to convey the basic meaning but lacks the flexibility required for a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with sentence structure, such as 'The structure presented below shows a college cafe which was remoderalised it previously', where the inclusion of 'it' is redundant. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect spacing. The range of sentence structures is limited, relying mostly on simple, repetitive patterns. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and using more complex structures like relative clauses or passive voice correctly to describe the changes in the cafe layout.
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