Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
THE BLUEPRINT GIVEN BELOW ILLUSTRATE A COLLEGE CAFE BEFOR IT WAS REDEVELOPED AND HOW IT LOOKS IN PRESENT.OVERALL, A NEW SEATING AREA IS INTRODUCE AND A COFFEE BAR AND TAKE AWAY FOOD SECTION IS ADDED AND CAFE HAS BEEN EXTENDED.
ON THE ONE HAND, CAFE BEFORE REDESIGN HAS A DEDICATED SPACE FOR STAFF DINING, AS SOON AS PEOPLE ENTER ON THE LEFT THERE WAS A BIN AND BESIDE THAT WERE TOILET ROOMS. TABLES AND CHAIRS WERE AT THE CENTER OF THE CAFE AND TOOK LARGE AMOUNT OF SPACE. ON THE FAR END, RIGHT SIDE THERE WAS A KITCHEN AND A SERVING AREA FOR ALL THE FOODS AND DRINKS.
ON THE OTHER HAND, IN PRESENT, CAFE has BEEN EXTENDED AND AN OUTER SEATING AREA IS ALSO AVAILABLE, FOR THAT NEW ENTRANCE AND EXIT ARE ADDED. ON THE ORIGNAL ENTRANCE THE BINS ARE REPLACED WITH RECYCLEING BINS, AND THE STAFF DINNING ROOMS ARE CONVERTED INTO COFFEE BAR AND TAKE AWAY FOOD ZONE. SALAD BAR IS PLACED AT THE END OF THE CAFE SEATING AT THE CENTER AND OUTSIDE ON THE LEFT A BARBECUE IS ADDED.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the cafe redesign, including the extension, the addition of the outdoor seating, and the repurposing of the staff dining area. However, the report lacks a clear, analytical overview. While you mention some changes, the summary is somewhat disjointed. To reach a higher band, ensure you group information logically—for instance, by focusing on structural changes versus functional changes. Additionally, some details, such as the 'barbecue' and 'salad bar' placement, are slightly confusing in their description. A more precise comparison between the 'before' and 'after' states would strengthen the response significantly.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organized into three paragraphs, which is a logical structure for this task. You use some cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to signal shifts in focus. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'for that new entrance and exit are added'). Improving the transition between the description of the original layout and the current layout would help the reader follow the progression more smoothly. Paragraphing is used appropriately, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs could be more refined.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to describe the layout changes effectively. You use terms like 'redeveloped', 'recycled', and 'converted' appropriately. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'BEFOR', 'DINNING', and 'ORIGNAL', which detract from the overall quality. Additionally, some phrasing is slightly unnatural, such as 'in present' instead of 'at present' or 'currently'. To improve, focus on accuracy in spelling and using more precise collocations to describe spatial changes, such as 'relocated' or 'partitioned'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'THE BLUEPRINT... ILLUSTRATE', 'A NEW SEATING AREA IS INTRODUCE') and article usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences lacking proper capitalization or containing run-on structures. To achieve a higher band, you need to demonstrate more consistent control over basic grammar, especially verb tenses and passive voice constructions, which are essential for describing processes and changes in diagrams.
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