Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The two blueprints illustrates a college cafe previous it was modified and how it designed at present. After redesigned outdoor seating have been added, Kitchen, and indoor seating arrangement remained same without any changes.
The cafe looks before redesign and after were with large space with minimum areas occupied by different categories, and tables and chairs area have remained constant without any modifications. At the left side of this area have added a salad bar also toilets have been remains same before and after modification. The bin have changed with recycling bin by extending some length of area. Previous cafe had Staff dining rooms However, this rooms have changed with Take away food counter and with a coffee bar. In North direction kitchen have not change before and after redesign but, Serving area(all food and drinks) had modified with Hot meals.
Mainly after redesigning of cafe they have set up an outdoor seating in large area and added a Barbecue.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies the main features of the cafe redesign, such as the addition of outdoor seating and the conversion of the staff room. However, the report is hampered by significant inaccuracies in describing the changes. For instance, you state the kitchen remained the same, whereas the plan shows it was relocated. Furthermore, the description of the layout is often confusing, making it difficult for the reader to visualize the changes. To improve, you should focus on clearly contrasting the 'before' and 'after' states with greater precision and ensure that your summary of the main trends is more accurate and logically structured.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical or misused, such as the awkward transition 'The cafe looks before redesign and after were with large space'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it hard to follow which part of the cafe is being discussed. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'whereas', 'subsequently', 'in contrast') and ensure that each sentence flows logically from the previous one to create a more coherent overview.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'changed', 'added', and 'remained'. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'The two blueprints illustrates' (subject-verb agreement) and 'Previous cafe had Staff dining rooms'. The vocabulary used is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, but it lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. You should aim to incorporate more specific vocabulary related to describing changes, such as 'relocated', 'transformed', 'expanded', or 'replaced', to demonstrate a more flexible range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('blueprints illustrates', 'toilets have been remains'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper syntax, which occasionally impedes the flow of information. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly subject-verb agreement and the correct use of tenses when describing changes. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles or incorrect verb forms will significantly enhance the clarity of your writing.
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