Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The map illustrates the information regarding plans about cafeteria in college authorities redesigned the cafe and this map shows how cafe looks today .in the following paragraphs i will describe both cafe before designs and how cafeteria looks today.
To begin with that, in design there was less space for sitting in cafe but we can see in today cafe there are lot of sitting area authorities add outdoor seating for generate more space in cafe
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 76 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. The description of the cafe redesign is extremely brief and lacks the necessary detail to provide a comprehensive summary of the main features or comparisons. Key elements of the visual data, such as the specific changes to the kitchen, counter, or seating arrangements, are largely ignored. To improve, you must provide a more thorough analysis of the changes shown in the diagrams and ensure the response meets the minimum length requirement to allow for full development of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is too short to demonstrate effective paragraphing or a logical progression of ideas. While there is a basic attempt to introduce the topic and use a transition like 'To begin with', the overall structure is underdeveloped. The lack of sufficient content makes it difficult to assess the use of cohesive devices or paragraphing skills. To improve, you should aim to structure your report with a clear introduction, an overview of the main trends, and detailed body paragraphs that compare the 'before' and 'after' states using a wider range of linking words.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, such as the repeated use of 'cafe' and 'looks'. There is a lack of precise terminology required for describing diagrams or spatial changes (e.g., 'layout', 'renovated', 'expanded', 'relocated'). The phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'for generate more space'. To reach a higher band, you need to incorporate a wider range of vocabulary related to describing changes and spatial arrangements, and ensure that words are used in their correct grammatical forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that hinder clarity, such as 'plans about cafeteria in college authorities redesigned' and 'today cafe'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and punctuation is inconsistent, with missing capital letters and improper sentence boundaries. The grammar is limited to simple, often fragmented, structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct subject-verb agreement and the use of articles, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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