Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The college cafe Before and After renovation of it new looks now -

overall, outdoar seating capacity were the main aim for the college cafe. cafe space were utilized by the management in the new design. also new tea were added in it.

on the one hand, the cafe before were design in a simple and clasic way- there were a good space for the kitchen, staff dinning room, tables and chair and many more. the cafe were mainly focus on the tables and chair, Although it was quite spacious but as the college students were getting higher in number, even it was not enough though later-

on the other hand, More changes were added to the cafe, The main change was to increase the seating space for the cafe, that why they has redesign the inside area, and outing door seating were introduce, staff dinning room were changed to Take away food and coffee bar, same for serving area to Hot meals, new st places were introduce also, which Barbecue and salad bar-

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the changes between the two plans, identifying the increase in seating capacity and the addition of new facilities like the salad bar. However, the report lacks a clear overview of the most significant changes, and the description of the layout is somewhat disorganized. Several details are vague, such as 'new tea were added,' which is not clearly supported by the visual data. The response covers the main features but lacks the precision required for a higher band, as the information is not always accurately reported or clearly contrasted.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand' without a clear logical flow. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. The punctuation is inconsistent, with frequent misuse of commas and capitalization, which disrupts the flow of information and makes the progression of ideas feel disjointed.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'change,' 'space,' and 'new.' There are several instances of incorrect word choice or collocation, such as 'outdoar seating' (outdoor) and 'new tea were added.' The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe the layout changes, such as 'st places' instead of 'seating areas.' While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of variety and the frequent errors in word formation prevent the response from reaching a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'seating capacity were,' 'cafe space were utilized') and tense usage. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences are often marred by errors in syntax and punctuation. There is a lack of control over basic grammar, such as pluralization and article usage. These errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, though the overall message remains decipherable.

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