Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The images illustrates a college cafe redesigned before and after it.
Overall, redesigned between before and after a college cafe, there are some technical and additional changed like recycling bin from bin, barbecue, outdoor seating, and other.
According to college cafe before redesigned, there are no any technical changed, and the area and places are few like there are staff dining rooms, bin, serving area. But, after redesigned there are many changes and additional things was added in comparison of before cafe.
In the second image of a college cafe after it designed. The recycling bin was developed from bin, and the staff dining rooms were transferred into a take away food and coffee bar. The serving area of food changed into a hot meal and the outside area of the college cage developed a barbecue and outdoor seating. But, the toilet still in it place in after uhsbd9whn huwdh9wn sijhedf.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to summarise the main features of the cafe redesign, but the information is presented in a fragmented and often confusing manner. While you identify some changes, such as the addition of a barbecue and the conversion of the staff dining room, the description lacks the precision required for an Academic Task 1 response. Key features are described vaguely, and the inclusion of non-sensical text at the end of the final paragraph significantly detracts from the task completion. To improve, focus on clearly grouping information by area or type of change and ensure all data points are described accurately without extraneous or unintelligible content.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'before and after' and 'in comparison of'. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two plans. The final sentence contains incoherent text, which breaks the flow of the entire response. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'subsequently', 'whereas', 'in contrast') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You rely heavily on basic terms like 'changed', 'things', and 'places', which do not demonstrate the range required for higher bands. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'technical changed' instead of 'structural changes' and 'developed from bin' instead of 'replaced the bin'. The use of non-English characters at the end of the text is a significant issue. To improve, aim to use more precise terminology related to maps and diagrams, such as 'transformed', 'relocated', 'expanded', or 'converted'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is frequently inaccurate, which often impedes communication. There are consistent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The images illustrates', 'things was added') and sentence structure. Many sentences are poorly constructed, making the meaning obscure. The use of articles and prepositions is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and practicing the correct use of passive voice, which is essential for describing changes in diagrams. Avoid overly complex structures until you have gained better control over basic sentence accuracy.
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