Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The plan show a collage cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now

In this plan their are some major changes like out door seating , staff dining rooms conversnt in to take away food and coffee bar.

it is cleary seen that cafe before redesign have a kitchen in front of kitchen there was serving area all food and drinks. There is a big space for tables and chairs there are two staff dining rooms of staff neer to the serving area In left botom these ware toilets or in front of toilets these was Bin for Garbis.

The Plan of today cafe

There is a kitche on Top Right side there are Hot meals in front of kitchen and on left side there is a Salad bar there are two romans one is

for take away food and other

one is Coffee bar these is

space for Tables and chairs

The Toilets are same as past

In front of Toilets There are

Recycling bins In front of

Salad bar There is Barbecue

or the outdoor seating area

for People.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response identifies the main features of the cafe redesign, such as the addition of the salad bar, outdoor seating, and the conversion of staff rooms. However, the report lacks a clear overview or summary of the most significant changes, which is a requirement for Task 1. The description is somewhat fragmented, and the information is not always presented in a logical, comparative manner. While the key features are mentioned, the lack of a cohesive summary and the informal, disjointed structure prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure you include an introductory overview that highlights the most prominent trends or changes observed between the two plans.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The response is difficult to follow due to poor paragraphing and a lack of cohesive devices. The text is broken into short, disjointed segments rather than a flowing report. There is a lack of logical progression between sentences, and the use of referencing (e.g., 'the toilets are same as past') is mechanical and sometimes unclear. The layout is fragmented, making it hard for the reader to track the comparison between the 'before' and 'after' states. Improving the use of linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', and 'subsequently' would significantly enhance the flow and logical structure of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, with several spelling errors that occasionally impede clarity, such as 'collage' for 'college', 'neer' for 'near', 'botom' for 'bottom', and 'Garbis' for 'garbage'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the spatial changes effectively. While the basic meaning is conveyed, the lack of precise terminology for describing layouts and changes (e.g., 'relocated', 'transformed', 'expanded') limits the score. You should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to describing maps and plans to improve your precision and range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The plan show', 'cafe before redesign have'), missing articles ('in front of kitchen'), and incorrect sentence structures. The response relies heavily on simple sentences, and there is a lack of complex structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with erratic capitalization and sentence fragments. These errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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