Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The plan showe the changes that have been made ice a college cafe from the past ice the present.

Overall, the cafe has been significantly redesigned. The main changes include the addition of a salad bar and outdoor seating area. In addition, the the staff dining room replaced with take away food and coffe bar

Before the redesigning the kitchen and serving area locted in the top of left corner. There are twce staff dining room middle of

the building. The toilets were situated right corner and bin was placed near right wall.

Today, the kitchen remains same place and seating area replaced with hot meals. Although staff dining room is changed with take away food and coffee bar. salad bar is added on left side of the cafe and more outdoor seating area is located bottom of the cafe. Furthermore barbecue locate near the outdoor seating area. Toilets and recycling bin situated in right side of the cafe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the cafe redesign, including the addition of the salad bar, the outdoor seating, and the conversion of the staff dining room. You provided a clear overview and compared the 'before' and 'after' states. However, the response lacks precision in describing locations (e.g., 'top of left corner' or 'middle of the building'), which makes it difficult for the reader to visualize the changes accurately. To improve, ensure you use more precise spatial language and ensure all key features mentioned in the prompt are clearly contrasted.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression from the 'before' to the 'after' state. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall,' 'In addition,' and 'Furthermore' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing and missing articles (e.g., 'salad bar is added'). The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'seating area replaced with hot meals,' which leaves the reader slightly confused about the spatial layout. Improving the use of transition words and ensuring clear subject-verb agreement will enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to describe the changes to the cafe. You use relevant terms like 'redesigned,' 'take away food,' and 'recycling bin.' However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and spelling mistakes, such as 'showe' instead of 'showed,' 'ice' instead of 'in,' and 'twce' instead of 'two.' These errors occasionally distract the reader. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise vocabulary for spatial descriptions and ensure accurate spelling of common words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with article usage (e.g., 'the the staff dining room'), missing prepositions, and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'kitchen remains same place'). Some sentences are fragmented or lack necessary verbs, which affects the clarity of your writing. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to lower the score. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for missing articles would significantly improve your accuracy.

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