Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The provided map illustrates the changes in college cafe which was registered and how it lookes now.

overall, it is lucid that the college cafe under went some several changes in future compared as the past. moreover,in the persent map there are newly construct areas for barbacua and outdoor seating wheras, kitchen in the north side and toilets in the south direction rmained unchanged.

by analysing , the past mape of college it can be clearly seen that in the north direction there staff dining rooms which paved way for take away food and coffe bar.additionally, serving area of all food and drinks was demolished .

Probing further, it is evedent that in today cafe have several changes such as, in north side hot meals area is reconstruct. Moreover, salad bar, barbcue ares are newly build in cafe. additionally, area of toilets and bins are remained unchanged.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified some key features of the cafe redesign, the description is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear, analytical overview. You mention changes in the north and south, but the reporting of specific features is inconsistent and occasionally confusing (e.g., mentioning 'barbacua' and 'hot meals' in different paragraphs). To improve, ensure you provide a more structured comparison between the two plans and ensure the word count is sufficient to cover all significant changes in detail.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by frequent errors in punctuation and sentence structure. While you use some cohesive devices like 'moreover' and 'additionally', they are often used mechanically or with incorrect punctuation. The progression of ideas is sometimes difficult to follow because the sentences are fragmented or poorly connected. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words correctly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that contributes to the overall summary of the changes.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and contains several spelling errors, such as 'barbacua', 'persent', 'mape', and 'evedent'. You rely on basic vocabulary to describe the changes, such as 'changes' and 'reconstruct'. To reach a higher band, you should aim for more precise terminology related to describing maps and changes, such as 'transformed', 'converted', 'relocated', or 'expanded'. Additionally, proofreading for basic spelling mistakes is essential, as these errors distract the reader and suggest a lack of attention to detail.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('kitchen... rmained'), article usage, and sentence construction ('in today cafe have several changes'). The range of structures is limited, and the errors are persistent, which occasionally impedes the clarity of your message. You should focus on mastering basic sentence structures, specifically ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practicing the correct use of prepositions and articles. Reducing these frequent errors will significantly improve the readability of your writing.

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