Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The map chart illustrates the changes in the campus cafe before renovated.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that the tables and chairs are locate on the middle of the cafe before and after redesign the cafe
After analysing the map chart into more detail, before redesign the cafe the kitchen was located on the north-east side of the corner it is stable on the same place Furthermore, in the down side of kitchen the serving area is demolished and now the hot meals erect on the similar please.
Moving towards the remaining information,thr staff dining room was constructed on the north corner of the map after the cafe redesign this areas is convert into take away and coffee bar .Moreover,the toilets was built in the right corner of the map in the today.Another striking thing is that the salad bar area and outdoor seating is newly added. Apart from this the bin was erected was north-east side of the map previous and earlier redesign the map.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by describing the main changes between the two plans. However, the overview is weak and inaccurate; stating that tables and chairs are located in the middle of the cafe 'before and after' is not supported by the visual evidence, as the layout changes significantly. While the response identifies several key features like the kitchen, serving area, and new additions, the description of locations is often imprecise or confusing (e.g., 'down side of kitchen'). To reach a higher band, you must provide a more accurate summary of the overall trends and ensure that all comparisons are factually correct based on the provided diagrams.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'Furthermore' and 'Moreover', they are sometimes used incorrectly or in a way that makes the text feel mechanical. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships between the different areas of the cafe. For example, phrases like 'in the down side of kitchen' and 'in the right corner of the map in the today' are confusing and hinder the logical flow of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'map chart' (it is a floor plan), 'stable on the same place', and 'hot meals erect'. The term 'erect' is used incorrectly here, as it usually refers to building structures rather than placing items. To improve, you should focus on learning specific vocabulary related to describing changes in diagrams, such as 'relocated', 'expanded', 'demolished', and 'transformed', and ensure you use these words in their correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the toilets was built'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'before renovated'), and awkward sentence structures (e.g., 'the bin was erected was north-east side'). The use of articles and prepositions is also inconsistent. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring subject-verb agreement will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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