Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The maps provide information about the changes have happened in the college cafe. Overall, the cafe was traditional and simple before outdoor seating and more food courts have been adding, which have made the place more convenient for customers.
Looking in the left part, salad bar has been added to the left side of the cafe. Kitchen has remained the same, while the serving area has been replaced with hot meals area. A new barbecue area has been created to the outside of the collage cafe, which also locates near a new door.
At the right side, two staff dining rooms have been completely reconstructed and have become a take away food and a coffee bar sections. The bin has removed and bigger recycling bins have been added in front of the toilets. In addition, a new door has been installed next to those toilets. In the outdoor part of the cafe, outdoor seating place has inserted, which make place more visitor friendly.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the cafe redesign, including the addition of the salad bar, the barbecue area, and the conversion of the staff dining rooms. You successfully identify the main changes and make relevant comparisons between the 'before' and 'after' states. However, the overview is slightly limited; while it mentions the cafe is now more convenient, it could be improved by summarizing the most significant structural changes more clearly. The description of the layout is generally accurate, though some spatial references are slightly imprecise. Overall, the response fulfills the requirements of the task well by highlighting the major transformations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction followed by body paragraphs focusing on different sections of the cafe (left, right, and outdoor). The progression of ideas is clear, and you use some cohesive devices such as 'In addition' and 'At the right side' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally slightly awkward, such as 'Looking in the left part'. Improving the variety of cohesive links would help the flow of the text feel more natural and sophisticated.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'reconstructed', 'installed', and 'convenient'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'have been adding' (should be 'have been added'), 'outdoor seating place has inserted' (should be 'has been inserted'), and 'the bin has removed' (should be 'has been removed'). These errors do not impede communication, but they indicate a need for more precise control over passive voice constructions and vocabulary related to spatial descriptions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use the passive voice, which is appropriate for describing changes, there are frequent errors in verb forms, such as 'changes have happened' (should be 'changes that have happened'), 'which also locates' (should be 'which is also located'), and 'make place more visitor friendly' (missing an article). These grammatical slips are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding the information. To reach a higher band, focus on ensuring consistent subject-verb agreement and correct passive voice formation.
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