Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The maps illustrate the layout of redevelopment of cafe and current design.

Overall, some changes has done and relocate some places. The staff dining rooms changed into take away food, built a new salad bar at the left corner and develop a barbecue corner.

Before the redevelopment of cafe on the north-west side there was a spacious kitchen on the top and there was a small serving area where all food and drinks were served to students. There were two rooms that was only for their staff. There was a toilet at the right side of the east-south side, near it a bin was also placed there. In the center, tables and chairs were placed for students to enjoy their meal.

After, renovation some changes has been made. The portion of serving area is replaced by the hot meals. The Staff dining rooms are changed into take away and a coffee bar, however, a salad bar is introduced at the left side of the corner. Additionally, On the south-west side, a barbecue area is developed and outdoor seating area is also introduced for students. Furthermore, simple bin is now replaced with the recycling bins.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the cafe redesign, including the relocation of the serving area and the addition of new facilities like the salad bar and barbecue area. You covered all parts of the task and provided a clear overview. However, the response could be improved by ensuring the comparisons are more precise. For example, you mention the 'staff dining rooms' changed into 'take away food', but you could have more clearly contrasted the spatial shift from the north-west to the south-west. The overview is functional but could be more analytical regarding the overall transformation of the space.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs detailing the 'before' and 'after' states. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'Furthermore', and 'however' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by mechanical phrasing and some awkward transitions. For instance, the sentence 'After, renovation some changes has been made' is slightly disjointed. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two time periods, which helps the reader follow the progression of the changes effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'redevelopment', 'renovation', and 'introduced'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'relocate some places' (should be 'relocated some facilities') and 'simple bin is now replaced' (should be 'the simple bin'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for a higher band. You rely on some repetitive structures when describing the changes, which limits the sophistication of the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('some changes has done', 'two rooms that was') and missing articles ('at the left side of the corner'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are persistent throughout the text. To improve, focus on ensuring that plural subjects have plural verbs and that articles are used consistently before nouns. The attempt at complex sentences is evident, but the control over these structures needs to be more consistent.

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