Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The blueprints illustrates information about a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

At the fleeting glance, at the southern side of the map, there is a barbecue in left corner, along with this, outdoor seating is also available there, which was not available in past. At the center of the cafe, tables and chairs are same as compared to past, but two new things are placed, salad bar at left hand side and recycling bins took place of bin in present time.

Moving ahead, in past, there were two rooms for staff dining, which are now replaced with take away food and coffee bar, at the upper side of tables and chairs. Moreover, kitchen is same in past and present, however, serving area with serve all food and drink is now replaced with hot meals.

Overall, the area become considerably more developed, with the construction of new facilities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the cafe redesign, including the addition of outdoor seating, the salad bar, and the changes to the staff dining area. However, the description is somewhat fragmented and lacks a clear overview of the most significant changes. While the key areas are mentioned, the comparison between the 'before' and 'now' states is occasionally confusing due to imprecise language. To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview clearly highlights the most striking transformations, such as the shift from staff-only areas to customer-focused facilities, rather than just listing changes in a sequential manner.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the description. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'At the fleeting glance' and 'Moving ahead'. The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the transition between the description of the southern area and the central area could be smoother. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to track the spatial layout of the cafe. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help the response flow more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. Phrases like 'two new things are placed' and 'took place of bin' are simplistic and slightly unnatural. There are also some minor errors in word choice, such as 'blueprints' (which is not strictly accurate for a floor plan) and 'at the fleeting glance'. To improve, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to spatial descriptions, such as 'situated', 'replaced by', 'transformed into', or 'adjacent to', and avoid repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The blueprints illustrates') and awkward phrasing ('kitchen is same in past and present'). There are also missing articles throughout the text, such as 'at left corner' instead of 'at the left corner'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and article usage will lead to significant improvement.

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