Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The map compares a college cafeteria in the past and at present after its reconstruction. Overall, the staff dining rooms are replaced by a take away food and a coffee bar. In addition to that, café expended and there is a new outdoor seating area introduced with a barbecue section

Before redesigning, the café used to have staff dining rooms but that is now replaced by a take away food and a coffee bar today, , Furthermore, previously, there was a huge space designated to tables and chairs, but now, the café has a salad bar and a comparatively larger recycle bin than it used to have before. Moreover, in the kitchen, the serving area is replaced by only hot meals now.

Apart from that, after reconstruction, we can see the outdoor seating area which previously wasn't there. Along with the seating area, a new barbecue section is also created. The cafeteria is now occupying a larger space than it was before.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response provides a clear overview of the changes, identifying the main features such as the removal of staff dining rooms and the addition of outdoor seating. However, the report lacks precision in describing the spatial changes. For instance, stating the café 'expended' (likely meaning expanded) is vague, and the description of the kitchen area is confusing. The comparison between the 'huge space' previously and the current 'salad bar' lacks the necessary detail to fully capture the transformation. To reach a higher band, you should focus on more accurate reporting of the specific locations and sizes of the features shown in the diagrams.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion-like summary. Cohesive devices such as 'In addition to that', 'Furthermore', and 'Apart from that' are used to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive. The referencing is generally clear, though the flow between sentences in the second paragraph is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing, such as the double comma after 'today, ,'. Overall, the progression of information is logical and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'reconstruction', 'designated', and 'cafeteria'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and spelling, such as 'expended' instead of 'expanded' and 'take away food' (which should be 'takeaway'). The phrase 'comparatively larger recycle bin' is a bit awkward. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations related to describing maps and plans, such as 'relocated', 'transformed', or 'situated'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'the café used to have staff dining rooms but that is now replaced' (subject-verb agreement) and 'the outdoor seating area which previously wasn't there' (informal contraction). Punctuation errors, such as the double comma, also detract from the overall accuracy. Increasing the variety of complex structures while ensuring subject-verb agreement and correct tense usage would help improve this score.

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