Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The two map show that the changes in college cafe before redesign and after redesign.
Overall, it is clear that college cafe have significant change. The most noticeable development is the construction of outdoor seating area Morever, the salad bar is newly development. While another major feature remained relatively unchanged.
If we looking at the bin now this are expanded Futhermore ,there are two more enterance and the outdoor have a barbecue which is newly design.There is noticeable change in take away and coffe bar because now it is converted into staff dining rooms.
If we talk about kitchen,table,chairs and toilets they all are remain unchanged, While the serving area of all food is converted into hot meals.
Conclusion, now the design of college cafe is based on modern era. New design of cafe facilates us with more services such as barbecue ,outdoor seating ,salad bar and with two major entrances.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the cafe redesign, such as the new outdoor seating, salad bar, and the conversion of the coffee bar into staff rooms. However, the report lacks precision in describing the spatial layout. For instance, stating 'If we talk about kitchen, table, chairs and toilets they all are remain unchanged' is a broad generalization that lacks the analytical detail required for a higher band. The overview is present but somewhat simplistic. To improve, you should focus on grouping the information more logically (e.g., structural changes versus functional changes) and ensuring that comparisons between the 'before' and 'after' states are more clearly articulated with specific reference to the provided visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the flow is frequently interrupted by mechanical errors and awkward transitions. Phrases like 'If we looking at' and 'If we talk about' are informal and do not function well as cohesive devices. While there is an attempt to use linking words like 'Furthermore' and 'Moreover', they are often punctuated incorrectly or used in a way that disrupts the logical progression of ideas. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial changes described. Improving the variety and accuracy of cohesive devices will significantly enhance the readability of your report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic verbs like 'is' or 'are' and struggle with accurate collocations. For example, 'newly development' is grammatically incorrect; 'newly developed' or 'a new addition' would be more appropriate. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'facilates us', which is not suitable for an academic report. The range of vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic message, but it lacks the precision and sophistication expected at higher levels. You should aim to use more precise terminology related to maps and floor plans, such as 'relocated', 'expanded', 'partitioned', or 'transformed'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('college cafe have', 'this are expanded') and tense usage ('they all are remain'). Sentence structures are largely simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after commas and periods, which affects the overall presentation. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb forms, and improving your control over punctuation. Reducing these frequent errors is essential for clearer communication.
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