Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagrams illustrate the old structure and structure after the renovation of a collage cafe. Overall, addition of some new sections and replacement of some previous spots to new
The cafe before redesign contained a main entry door for customers, dustbin and toilets were beside it. This the main hall of the food point, tables and chairs had been placed in this hall, along with two dining rooms for staff where they can took break or to eat something or get relaxed. Turning towards the right side from the main hall, there was a door which connected the main hall to the kitchen area and the serving area for all foods and drinks.
When This food point expanded it added many new spots and food points. The structure for main entry point toilets and recycle bin were same, again there was a dining area with tables and chairs, it connects with many different new points. After crossing toilet area there is a way which leads to the outdoor sitting across it there is a addition of barbecue point along with the salad bar inside of the main hall, staff dining room were replaced with take away food and coffee area. along with the area which served as food and drink points replaced with hot meals and kitchen was at the same place and connected by a door with main hall.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The candidate attempts to address the task by comparing the layout of a college cafe before and after redesign. Key features such as the entrance, toilets, dining areas, and kitchen are identified, and the main changes like the addition of a barbecue point, salad bar, and coffee area are noted. However, the response is incomplete and stops abruptly in the middle of a sentence at the end of the first paragraph ('replacement of some previous spots to new'). Furthermore, the description contains inaccuracies and lacks a clear overview summarizing the main trends or overall transformations of the cafe. Consequently, the development of ideas is limited, leading to a band score of 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is divided into three paragraphs, including an incomplete introduction, but the logical flow and progression are significantly impaired by poor structuring and mechanical phrasing. The response opens with an unfinished sentence fragment, and cohesive devices are repetitive or inadequately used (e.g., excessive use of comma splices and run-on sentences like 'Turning towards the right side from the main hall, there was a door which connected the main hall to the kitchen area...'). Referencing is sometimes unclear, and paragraph boundaries do not follow a logical progression of information between the old and new layouts, resulting in an overall score of 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, reflecting a limited range appropriate for this task type. The student relies on elementary descriptions such as 'main entry door', 'dustbin', 'tables and chairs', and 'food points'. There are notable word choice and spelling errors, such as 'collage' instead of 'college', and awkward collocations like 'food point' and 'outdoor sitting'. While communication is occasionally achieved for basic spatial references, the lexical resource is restricted and falls under band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text features numerous structural errors, including missing words, incorrect verb tenses, and pervasive punctuation issues like comma splices. For example, the sentence 'When This food point expanded it added many new spots and food points' lacks necessary punctuation and capitalization control. Complex structures are attempted but are frequently faulty, and simple sentences often contain errors. The frequency of grammatical inaccuracies impedes smooth reading, justifying a band score of 5.0.
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