Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagram illustrates a college cafe initially when it was designed and how the cafe looks in present after it has been redesigned and what changes have been made lately.
Overall, the major change which are made are increase in the seating area which is expanded outside, furthermore addition of barbecue area, Coffee bar, Salad bar and Take away food has been added in the new plan but the dinning room for staff has been removed in the new plan.
In the cafe plan before redesigning, there were serving area for all foods and drinks, dining room specficilly for staff and no outside seating area in contrast to the new redesigned plan where seating area has been expanded outside the building. Hot meals has taken the place of serving area where now freshly cooked food will be delivered, Barbecue has been added Salad bar has been established, Coffee shop and Take away foods has taken the place of Staff dining rooms increasing the variety of foods and beverages for the locals
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The candidate has attempted to address the task by summarizing the main features of the college cafe before and after its redesign. An overview is provided in the second paragraph, which captures major changes such as the expansion of the seating area and the removal of the staff dining room. However, the development of information lacks precision. For instance, the reference to 'Hot meals has taken the place of serving area' and 'Take away foods has taken the place of Staff dining rooms' contains inaccurate interpretations of the layout. While the response covers the main trends, the lack of precise reporting and underdeveloped detail places this performance within Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into three paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and a body paragraph. However, the logical progression is hindered by poor paragraphing and a lack of clear cohesive management. The second paragraph starts with a very long, run-on sentence ('Overall, the major change which are made are increase in the seating area...'). Furthermore, the use of cohesive devices is inadequate and repetitive, and referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the dangling clauses in the final paragraph. There is no full stop at the end of the text, indicating a lack of basic punctuation control. Overall arrangement shows some basic organization, aligning with Band 5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent lexical and collocational inaccuracies. Examples include 'in present after', 'major change which are made are increase', and 'dinning room specficilly'. The candidate attempts some topic-specific vocabulary such as 'barbecue area', 'Coffee bar', and 'Salad bar', but these are tied together with awkward phrasing and grammatical errors. Spelling mistakes like 'specficilly' and 'dinning' further lower the lexical score. The range is limited and minimally adequate for the task, causing some difficulty for the reader, which fits Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at longer, more complex sentences frequently result in serious structural errors and non-agreement. Examples of grammatical faults include 'Hot meals has taken' (singular/plural mismatch), 'which are made are increase', and missing punctuation at the conclusion of the response. Simple sentences are also poorly controlled, and run-on sentences are prevalent. Frequent errors cause difficulty and strain for the reader, placing this submission firmly at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 for isolated accurate simple structures.
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