Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The plans illustrates the transformation of a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks in the present days.
Overall, the college cafe underwent a considerable redevelopment, with staff dining rooms being replaced by cafe bar and take away foods. In addition, outdoor seating and barbecue was introduced, while kitchen area, toilets and the centre area of cafe occupied by table and chairs have been retained.
Before the renovation, the kitchen was situated in the top-hand side corner, with serving area for all food and drinks in-front of it. Directly to its right-hand side staff dining rooms were based. Where as half of the area was occupied by tables and chairs in the cafe. Furthermore, can the figure for toilets are based on the south-eastern Section.
The new layout was significantly modernized by adding outdoor seating for more space and barbecue for more facilities. The toilets, recycling bin and kitchen was largely unchanged. while, the staff dining rooms was replaced by take away foods and coffee bar. In addition a salad bar was also added, making the cafe more sophisticated and well-organized.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response successfully addresses all parts of the task by summarising the main features of the college cafe before and after its redesign, and includes relevant comparisons. The overview captures the major transformations clearly, noting the replacement of staff dining rooms with a coffee bar and takeaway food counters, alongside the introduction of outdoor seating and a barbecue. Details regarding retained features such as the kitchen and toilets are also accurately reported. While some minor details could be further elaborated, the response covers all required aspects well, satisfying the criteria for a Band 7.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response has a clear overall progression and logical organisation. It begins with an introductory statement, followed by an overview paragraph, and then detailed body paragraphs contrasting the old and new layouts. Cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'Furthermore', and 'Before the renovation' are used to link ideas, although there are minor issues with referencing and phrasing like 'Where as half of the area...' which disrupt the flow slightly. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the introduction, overview, and specific spatial descriptions, leading to a solid Band 6.5 performance.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for describing a visual diagram, employing terms such as 'transformation', 'redevelopment', 'modernized', and 'sophisticated'. However, there are some noticeable word-choice and collocation errors, such as 'The plans illustrates' (subject-verb agreement/vocabulary slip) and 'top-hand side corner'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with mixed success. Spelling is generally accurate, but the lexical control is somewhat limited, placing this response firmly in the Band 6.0 category.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, with several successful complex structures used to describe spatial relationships and changes. However, there are frequent grammatical errors and punctuation issues throughout the text, such as 'The plans illustrates' (singular/plural mismatch), 'can the figure for toilets are based' (awkward and ungrammatical phrasing), and improper comma usage ('The toilets, recycling bin and kitchen was...'). These errors occasionally cause minor confusion for the reader, although communication is not severely impeded. This profile aligns well with a Band 5.5 score.
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