Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The plans below illustrates a collage canteen layout before and after how comprehensive modifications done with several renovation.
Overall, cafe undervent significant mordernization throughtout several accesible facility altered on the upper right hand side of the cafeteria like kitchen remain on its principle position and outlet present in the front, to handle services and transaction .A seriving room get replaced by hot meals. some specialized features like tables and chairs drawn at their original position. basic aminities like salad bar and barbeque integrated at left corner.
In post-renovation staff dining rooms transformed into take away food and coffee bar with a generic maximize area in centre. Toilet get preserved with a bin which get upgraded to recycling bin for a sustainability purpose. Additionally an open air seating area facilitated along barbecue. subsquently the new area of cafe has transformed in avery suitable manner so that it will make a significant change .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to describe the main features of the two plans showing the college cafe before and after redesign. While some key changes are mentioned, such as the kitchen remaining in its principle position and staff dining rooms transforming into a take away food and coffee bar, the summary is incomplete and disorganized. Important details like the expansion of the seating area, the addition of a new entrance, and the overall reconfiguration of space are either missed or described with confusing phrasing, such as 'generic maximize area in centre'. The overview sentence attempts to summarize the general changes ('cafe undervent significant mordernization'), but overall the response falls short of fully selecting and reporting all main features, leading to a Band 5.0 rating.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response shows an attempt to structure the information with an introduction, an overview paragraph, and a body paragraph. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor sentence construction and a lack of clear cohesive devices. Transitions between ideas are abrupt, such as moving directly from the kitchen description to 'A seriving room get replaced by hot meals' without appropriate linking. Furthermore, paragraphing is not used effectively; the entire body of the report is clumped into one dense block after the overview. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships between features on the plan. This level of cohesion and organization aligns with Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is quite limited and contains numerous spelling and word-choice errors that impede communication. Examples include 'illustrates' combined with a plural subject ('plans below illustrates'), 'collage' instead of 'college', 'undervent' for 'underwent', 'mordernization', 'accesible', 'seriving', 'aminities', 'barbeque', and 'subsquently'. While the student attempts less common items like 'mordernization' and 'sustainability', the frequent spelling mistakes ('v' for 'w', missing letters) and inappropriate collocations ('generic maximize area') restrict the lexical score to a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on the attempt to use task-specific vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, and simple sentences are frequently marred by errors. There are frequent issues with subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, such as 'plans below illustrates', 'kitchen remain', 'A seriving room get replaced', and 'Toilet get preserved'. Complex sentence attempts are often ungrammatical or awkwardly phrased, such as 'cafe has transformed in avery suitable manner so that it will make a significant change'. Punctuation is also weak, with missing commas and run-on phrasing. Because errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader in grasping the exact meaning, a Band 4.5 is warranted, which corresponds to a Band 4.5 or 5.0 descriptor profile; Band 5.0 is awarded as meaning is still largely discernible.
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