Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided diagram demonstrate the changes of college cafe from before it was redesigned and after residesigned [current cafe].
Overall , there is a lots of notable changes like serving area there food and drinks sold convert into hot meals ,staff dining into take away food and coffe bar whereas other reamined unchanged .But there is some additional amenities like saladbar , barbecue , and lots of outdoor seating.
Before redesigned college cafe ,there is certain facilities are available like kitchen which cover preety much space situated in northen part in the infront of it after intering from door in the right side there is a serving area available in the eartern part where all kind of food and drinks are available .In the centre of this map there is two joint room in square shaped in front of it there is some table and chairs for the staff to have their food.whereas in the eastern part straight to tables and chair there is bin available in the below of bin in the southern part toilets is located.
After redesigned , there is lots of facilities that has been renovated and converted such as serving area are changes into hot meals and staff dining room converted into two parts of room left one for take away food and right onr for coffe bar Whereas there is lot of facilities is added like salad bar in thewestern part , barbecue in the western part too but below the salad bar and outdoor seating in the outlet of maps whereas other remained samed such as kitchen ,bin and toilets.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover all parts of the task by reporting the main features and outlining changes to the college cafe, such as the conversion of the serving area and staff dining room, and the addition of the salad bar, barbecue, and outdoor seating. However, the information is presented with notable inaccuracies and confusion regarding spatial locations (e.g., misidentifying cardinal directions and positions). While an overview is attempted in the second paragraph, the overall development of comparisons is somewhat hindered by imprecise descriptions and unclear referencing. Consequently, it fits the profile of a Band 5.0 response, as it addresses the task and highlights key features, but the execution contains significant limitations in clarity and accuracy.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, including a brief introduction and an overview, followed by body paragraphs detailing the before and after states. However, the overall organization lacks smooth progression and logical flow. Cohesive devices are used minimally or inappropriately, and referencing is frequently unclear (e.g., repeating phrases like 'in the western part' and using vague demonstratives like 'the outlet of maps'). Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak and mechanical. This demonstrates characteristics consistent with a Band 5.0 in Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors and non-standard forms such as 'residesigned', 'coffe bar', and 'samed'. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary related to the prompt (such as 'amenities', 'renovated', and 'converted'), inaccuracies in spelling and collocation are noticeable throughout the text. These errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, though the general topic remains discernible. The lexical range is minimally adequate for the task, aligning closely with the Band 5 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and overly repetitive patterns like 'there is' or 'there is lots of'. Attempts at more complex structures are frequently faulty, leading to run-on sentences and grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('diagram demonstrate', 'there is a lots') and incorrect tense usage ('Before redesigned college cafe, there is certain facilities are available'). Frequent errors in punctuation and grammar are present throughout, causing some difficulty for the reader and restricting the score to a Band 4.5 or 5.0. A score of 5.0 is awarded as meaning is generally communicated despite the frequent structural flaws.
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