Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The map shows the college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Their are several changes happens after redesigning process.In many areas their are developments like outdoor seating. Some are relocated for example, the section of staff dining rooms changes into take away food and coffee bar section. Few locations are same as before like toilets and kitchen
The cafe before was constructed with very limited sections. But after redesigning, more things has added which includes expanding siting and adding barbecue section outside. Kitchen is as same as before. However, serving area converted into hot meal sections. one more noticeable change is staff dining area which, is now replaced by take away food and coffee bar for more convenience. Bin area is also expanded by the addition of more recycling bins. Toilets are same as before. Salad bar is also added on the northern west of cafe. There are several noticeable changes happens after redesigning cafe.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by describing the main differences between the college cafe before and after the redesign. Key changes are mentioned, such as the addition of outdoor seating, a barbecue area, a salad bar, and the conversion of the staff dining rooms into take-away food and coffee bar sections. However, the overview is very basic and repetitive, and some spatial references are imprecise, such as locating the salad bar on the 'northern west' instead of the western wall. While the main features are touched upon, the lack of a cohesive overview and superficial reporting place this response in Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks proper paragraphing, with multiple short, choppy sentences and paragraphs that do not logically group information. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes repetitive or misused (e.g., 'There are several noticeable changes happens after redesigning cafe' repeated at the beginning and end). Although the progression of ideas is somewhat discernible because it contrasts 'before' and 'after', the overall organization is weak and mechanical, failing to provide a clear and smooth narrative throughout.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is quite basic and repetitive throughout the text (e.g., 'changes', 'sections', 'added', 'same as before'). There are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'redesigning process', 'their are several changes happens', and 'northern west'. The student attempts some task-specific vocabulary like 'take away food', 'coffee bar', and 'barbecue', but the range remains limited and inadequate for a higher band, frequently causing minor comprehension strain.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writing contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement and plurals (e.g., 'Their are several changes happens', 'more things has added', 'siting', 'Few locations are same'). Sentence structures are predominantly simple or faulty when complexity is attempted. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing capital letters and misplaced commas or periods within clauses. These frequent errors impede fluency and lower the grammatical score.
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