Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The plans below show the cafe before and after redesigne.
Kitchen is present on same place as before.In previous cafe there was serving area where all food and drinks were served from one place but in todays cafe on this place there is hot meal which is served from this area.On right side in old cafe there was staff dinning room only but in redesigned cafe this one section splits in two sections one is for take away food and other one is for coffee bar.
Tables and chairs are on same place as before in the middle of the cafe.Toilet is also on the same place where it was before.There was a bin in previous cafe but in redesigned cafe there is recyclying bins on the same place as before .In redesigned cafe there is a salad bar and outdoor sitting area avalible for barbeque which was not presesnt in old cafe.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers several key features of the college cafe before and after its redesign, noting the kitchen remaining in the same place, the changes to the serving area and staff rooms, and the addition of features like the salad bar, recycling bins, and outdoor seating with a barbecue. However, the report lacks a clear overview summarizing the main overall changes, which is a vital requirement for Academic Task 1. Furthermore, the formatting is weak, as the entire response is written as a single dense paragraph rather than structured paragraphs. While the main details are generally accurate according to the visual data, the lack of an overview and improper structuring prevent this from achieving a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The text suffers from significant structural deficiencies. The entire response is presented in one continuous block of text without proper paragraphing. Cohesive devices are extremely limited and repetitive, relying mostly on simple conjunctions and phrases like 'in previous cafe', 'in todays cafe', and 'on the same place as before'. There is no clear logical progression guiding the reader smoothly from one area of the cafe to another. Referencing is sometimes repetitive, and the lack of a proper introduction, body paragraphs, and concluding overview severely limits coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is quite basic and repetitive throughout the response. Phrases such as 'on same place as before', 'in previous cafe', and 'in redesigned cafe' are used repeatedly. There are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'redesigne' (redesign), 'todays cafe' (today's cafe), 'hot meal' (hot meals), 'dinning room' (dining room), 'recyclying' (recycling), and 'avalible' (available). The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for communicating basic facts, but the lack of precise synonyms and frequent spelling errors restrict the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, but the grammatical accuracy is weak. There are numerous punctuation and capitalization errors, such as missing spaces after periods (e.g., 'before.In previous', 'area.On right'), lack of articles (e.g., 'Kitchen is present', 'Toilet is also on the same place'), and awkward prepositional usage ('on same place' instead of 'in the same place'). Complex structures are often faulty or run-on, such as 'There was a bin in previous cafe but in redesigned cafe there is recyclying bins on the same place as before .'. These frequent errors cause some distraction for the reader.
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