Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
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firstly we know that the cafe hold a large waiting area for visitors and guests including some chairs and tables.Kitchen placed on the eastren side of the cafe and also included the serving area for all foods and drinks near the kitchen.the two dining rooms held in the cafe that will be changes when the cafe will be redesign and a toilet placed in the corner of the cafe and a bin in the front of the toilet for waste and useless things the cafe designed in L shape and its entry ans existing point is in the right side of the bin.
on the other hand ,we discuss about the cafe that could b redesigned there are some major changes in cafe .the main change is he outdoor seating placed outside the cafe and salad bar placed in the waiting area where tables and chairs are placed.The staff dining rooms should b replaced by take away food and coffee bar the serving area also exchanged by hot meal and the kitchen remain same on its place at last barbecue included in cafe.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to describe the changes to the college cafe, identifying several key alterations such as the addition of outdoor seating, a salad bar, and the conversion of staff dining rooms into a take-away food area and coffee bar. However, the response contains several inaccuracies regarding spatial orientation and features, such as stating the kitchen was on the eastern side when the plan shows it in the upper-left, and mentioning a 'useless things' bin rather than recycling bins. The overview is weak and lacks a clear summary of the overall spatial transformation. Therefore, the task is addressed only partially, aligning with Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is divided into two lengthy paragraphs representing the 'before' and 'after' states, but the internal organization lacks logical progression. The response suffers from a heavy run-on sentence structure, particularly in the first paragraph, where multiple clauses are strung together without proper punctuation or capitalization (e.g., 'Kitchen placed on the eastren side...'). Cohesive devices are either missing or rudimentary, relying on basic transitions like 'firstly' and 'on the other hand'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the overall progression of information is hindered by poor sentence boundary control, placing this in Band 4.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily relies on direct lifting or simple descriptions from the prompt (e.g., 'tables and chairs', 'serving area', 'kitchen'). There are frequent spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'eastren' instead of eastern, 'ans existing' instead of entrance and exit, and 'b' instead of be. Less common lexical items are attempted with significant inaccuracy or inappropriate collocations (e.g., 'bin in the front of the toilet for waste and useless things'). This demonstrates a limited lexical range characteristic of Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences suffer from severe punctuation and capitalization errors, run-on structures, and missing verbs (e.g., 'the cafe hold a large waiting area', 'the two dining rooms held in the cafe that will be changes'). Complex structures are attempted but are consistently faulty, and simple sentences often contain basic agreement or tense errors (e.g., 'the kitchen remain same on its place'). Due to the high frequency of errors that frequently strain the reader's comprehension, a Band 4 is appropriate.
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