Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The plans below represents improvement in shape of college cafe by saying that how it was redesigned and how it looks now.
By looking at the plans,I have understanded that there is special changing in kitchen and serving area and staff dining rooms.The place of salad bar has being made in present day looking which is very beautiful.
By observing the structure of plans,there is main alteration in staff dining room.This site is replaced by take away food and coffee bar.The place of serving area just beside the kitchen is replaced by hot meals.In present looking of cafe,there has being made a place of barbecue and seating and salad bar.In past design of cafe, these were no such three sites there.But the recycling bins and toilets are same in both designs.The present day looking of cafe is very beautiful than the past designing.The redesigning of cafe attracts and persuades the customers toward itself.It will increase the economy of cafe.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main changes between the two plans, noting modifications to the kitchen area, staff dining rooms, serving area, and the addition of the salad bar, barbecue, and outdoor seating. However, the tone is inappropriately subjective and speculative, as seen in phrases like 'the present day looking of cafe is very beautiful' and 'it will increase the economy of cafe,' which are not required or suitable for an academic task 1 report. Furthermore, there is no clear overview paragraph summarising the main trends. The student touches upon relevant features, but the development and academic register fall short of higher bands. This performance aligns with Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text suffers from poor paragraphing, as it consists of just two blocks of text, with the first sentence standing almost isolated and the second paragraph clumping multiple disparate points together. While basic cohesive devices and transition phrases are used, such as 'By looking at the plans' and 'In present looking of cafe,' referencing and logical progression are frequently faulty and mechanical. The flow lacks smooth transitions between sentences, making the overall arrangement somewhat disjointed. This level of organisation corresponds to a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily relying on words directly lifted from the prompt or simple descriptors like 'very beautiful.' There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word formations, such as 'understanded' instead of understood, 'present day looking' instead of current layout or present design, and 'has being made' instead of has been added. The range is minimally adequate to convey basic points about the diagram changes, but frequent vocabulary inaccuracies restrict the score to a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on general task execution.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or poorly constructed attempts at complex forms, and there are frequent and intrusive grammatical errors. Examples include tense and voice misuse such as 'has being made' and 'these were no such three sites there,' along with punctuation and comma splice issues like 'plans,I have understanded'. These persistent errors cause frequent strain for the reader and prevent the text from achieving a higher band. This corresponds to a Band 4.0.
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