Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In this picture provide the information about collage cafe difference between now and before renowvations.There are very major change come after redesign the cafe. Firstly,now they provider outdoor seating for people that is now before.Moreover,in this building have hot meals area and salad bar also available that is not in old one.The area of old one is so small and lack of facility.One of most important thing that in now they trash recycl bin for all people they can put theri trash in that atfter recycled they can reuse. Lastly one good thing in the old cafe is have seperat dining room for the staff so they can get their break and feel relax but new one do not have any special room for staff.Although, new cafe people can do barbecue party with thier friends that is good change for all people.
According to my point of view redesgin cafe is best and it lots of facilities to the people
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the main features of the two plans by pointing out key changes, such as the addition of outdoor seating, a salad bar, and a barbecue area, alongside the removal of the staff dining rooms. However, the overview is very basic and lacks a well-structured summary of the overall transformation. Furthermore, the writing falls short of providing a fully developed or academic-style report, relying instead on informal observations (e.g., 'According to my point of view'). While some key features are mentioned, the lack of a proper introductory overview and the simplistic reporting style place this response in Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text lacks proper paragraphing, as it is written as a single dense block of text, which significantly hinders readability and logical flow. While basic cohesive devices and transition words are used (e.g., 'Firstly', 'Moreover', 'Lastly'), their usage is often repetitive or mechanically forced. The progression of ideas is disjointed, jumping erratically between changes without a clear spatial or thematic organisation (such as moving from the interior to the exterior). Referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as 'the old one' and 'new one'. These issues reflect Band 4.5 to 5.0 characteristics; therefore, a band score of 5.0 is appropriate.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is extremely limited and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors and non-standard collocations (e.g., 'renowvations', 'provider', 'trash recycl bin', 'theri'). The student attempts some less common vocabulary items like 'redesigned' and 'recycling', but spelling and morphological errors are persistent throughout the response (e.g., 'seperat', 'redesgin'). The range of vocabulary is barely adequate to convey the basic message, resulting in strain for the reader. This performance aligns closely with the Band 4 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of basic, error-prone sentences joined by simple conjunctions. There are frequent and severe grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing verbs (e.g., 'In this picture provide', 'that is now before'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'after redesign the cafe'), and faulty subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'there is very major change come'). Complex structures are rarely attempted, and when they are, they are inaccurate. These pervasive errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.
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