Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The ideas present a college before it was redesigned and how it looks now. the cafe is redesigned and many other thing as add in the redesigned cafe. specially change in the service data areas and the adding thing is outdoor seating, barbecue.
The map designed and redesigned between the difference is severals things. the cafe is not totally change but severals things there are staff dining rooms cultivated to the two part. one part is the take away food and another is coffee bar. other change things cafe before redesign and today is seving area(all food and drink) converted into thehot meals these are the main things to decurate the things about the redesigned the cafe.also adding the salad bar in the infront side of the tables and chairs.
On the other hand, salad bar near the another room and two different things are add. this is the barbecue and outdoor seating room is add. this is the severals things are changed and some things is add in the first designrd cafe and today cafe. same things are toilets, recycle bins and kitchen area is same place.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The student attempts to summarize the changes shown in the two maps, noting that the kitchen remains in the same position while the serving area, staff dining rooms, and bin locations have been modified, and that outdoor seating and a barbecue have been added. However, the response fails to provide a clear, structured overview of the main trends or overall changes. Several details are vague or confusingly phrased, such as 'cultivated to the two part', and the description lacks sufficient extension and precise reporting of the spatial layout comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is divided into three short paragraphs, but the logical flow and progression are weak. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in disjointed sentences (e.g., 'On the other hand, salad bar near the another room and two different things are add.'). Paragraphing is attempted, but ideas are grouped somewhat haphazardly without clear thematic separation between the indoor and outdoor modifications, making the overall arrangement difficult to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is extremely limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic words like 'changed', 'add', and 'things'. There are numerous word-formation and collocation errors, such as 'service data areas', 'cultivated to the two part', and 'decurate the things'. These lexical inaccuracies frequently impede communication and strain the reader's understanding.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very narrow, consisting mostly of simple and severely flawed sentence structures. There are persistent, basic errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, articles, and word order (e.g., 'The ideas present a college before it was redesigned', 'the cafe is not totally change', 'these are the main things to decurate'). Complex structures are rarely attempted and are invariably inaccurate.
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