Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The plans represent a college cafe before refurbishment and how it looks now .

Furthermore, there are dramatically numerous changes in the areas of cafe such as , takeway food, bars , hot meals and many more.

Overall, it is crystal clear that the cafe have begin resigned for the better services which includes, take away food and outdoor facilities for the students.

On the one hand , before the cafe was not giving much facilites to the pupils the ambience was not much attractive moreover, cafeteria only had indoor dining facilites .

On the other hand, now the atelier looks more fascinating with different facilities such as, outdoor seating, barbecue, salad bar, hot meal.

The students can now have numerous cusinie, while enoying the natural atmosphere.

Furthermore, on the place of staff dining room coffee bar and take away food has been added and toilets and bin are in the same area .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the task by comparing the two college cafe plans, noting key changes such as the addition of take-away food, a coffee bar, a salad bar, and outdoor seating. However, the response lacks a well-developed overview, which is a crucial requirement for Academic Task 1. Some descriptions are vague or inaccurate, such as referring to the cafe as an 'atelier', and certain details are presented with limited precision. While main features like the kitchen, toilets, and seating areas are mentioned, the lack of a structured, comprehensive overview and the presence of minor misinterpretations pull the score to this level, corresponding to Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text is organised into short paragraphs, attempting to contrast the 'before' and 'after' states using transitional phrases such as 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand'. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing, repetitive connectors like 'Furthermore', and poor sentence linking. Paragraphing is present but basic, and referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'on the place of staff dining room'). Cohesive devices are used mechanically rather than flexibly. These issues reflect Band 5 characteristics, where some organisation is evident but overall progression is inconsistent.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is somewhat limited and contains noticeable errors in word choice and collocation. For instance, the student refers to the cafe as an 'atelier' and writes 'cafe have begin resigned' instead of 'redesigned'. Spelling and morphological errors are present (e.g., 'takeway', 'cusinie', 'enoying'). While there are attempts to use less common vocabulary like 'ambience' and 'fascinating', inaccuracies and misuse of terms cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from reaching a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at more complex constructions are consistently marred by errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the cafe have begin resigned') and missing articles or prepositions. Punctuation errors, including unnecessary spaces before commas and full stops, are also common. Frequent grammatical errors cause strain and difficulty for the reader, placing the writing squarely at Band 5.

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