Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
the graph clearly illustrate the version of college cafe map that has upgraded to make it big and better for costumers.
As we see that befor map was only offers a specifics vibes in a looks . updated version of college cafe has include more facilities for students to fell them comfortable.
However befor redesinging of college cafe it was seperated in only two sections if we see that kitchen and serving area all foods and drink and oanother section for table and chairs was large space and staff dining room was seperated in it.and toilet was in corner and bin was closed to it.
Now the updated version of map they keep same place for kitchen but added hotmeal option.Tables and chairs has seperated by adding salad bars left side and removed staff dinning room in two section one for take away food and another for cofee bar.Bin area convert in recycling it toilet is same place .Another update added two extra option such as barbeque room and outdoor seating .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the main features of the two maps, noting key changes such as the addition of the salad bar, the replacement of the staff dining rooms with a coffee bar and take-away section, and the inclusion of outdoor seating and a barbecue. However, the descriptions are often imprecise, and the overview lacks clarity. The writer mentions some changes correctly, such as 'kitchen remains in same place', but misinterprets certain spatial arrangements and fails to provide a well-structured summary of the overall transformations. The detail is somewhat limited and the development of ideas is restricted by frequent inaccuracies in describing the visual data. This places the response in Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response shows some basic organisation, dividing the text into an introduction, a discussion of the 'before' map, and a discussion of the 'today' map. However, there is no clear overall progression or logical sequencing of ideas, and paragraphing is poorly handled with run-on sentences and a lack of proper structure. Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or inaccurate (for example, 'As we see that befor map', 'However befor redesinging', and 'Now the updated version'). Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial comparisons smoothly. This performance corresponds to Band 4.5, which is rounded to Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and restricted to simple terms (e.g., 'big', 'better', 'place', 'added'). There are numerous word-choice and collocation errors, such as 'costumers' instead of 'customers', 'befor map was only offers a specifics vibes', and 'Bin area convert in recycling it toilet is same place'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary fail due to inaccurate forms and awkward phrasing. These frequent lexical errors and limited range cause strain for the reader, fitting the Band 4 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple or poorly constructed compound sentences. Attempts at complex sentences are consistently faulty (e.g., 'As we see that befor map was only offers...'). There are severe issues with subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, missing articles, and punctuation throughout the response (e.g., 'Tables and chairs has seperated', 'staff dinning room in two section'). Grammatical errors are dense and frequently impede communication, aligning with the Band 4 descriptors.
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