Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The two maps illustrates the development of a Cafe in a college from past to present.
overall area increases with the period of the time including the outdoor seating Furthermore, recycling bin ,toilet ,kitchen and area for tables and chairs remains on the same spot.
most of the changing occur on the same area converting same area in to other thing making it for useful for example both maps demonstrate the difference in certain areas for instance staff dining area is converted into take away food area and coffee bar moreover, serving area is transformed in to hot meals .also redesigning includes salad bar and barbecue area with some out door seating area, also the area for bin remain on the same spot but area increases.
overall, space remains the same and became useful that it will give more annual yield and profit and now it provides more seating area so it will became less crowded.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The candidate attempts to summarise the main changes shown in the two maps, noting features such as the conversion of the staff dining area into a take-away food area and coffee bar, the addition of a salad bar, outdoor seating, and a barbecue area. However, the response suffers from several inaccuracies regarding the visual data. For instance, the student states that the overall area increases and that the space remains the same, which is speculative and not supported by the plans. Furthermore, the description of the layout changes is at times confused and lacks a clear, structured overview of the most significant transformations. This places the response in the Band 5.0 range, as the task is only partially addressed with some under-developed and unclear ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks conventional paragraphing, being presented as a single block of text with an unseparated introductory and concluding sentence. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively, with excessive reliance on running clauses together using 'furthermore', 'moreover', and 'also'. The logical progression of information is hindered by run-on sentences and punctuation errors, such as missing capital letters and erratic spacing. While there is an overall attempt to compare the 'before' and 'after' states, the lack of clear paragraph structure and mechanical cohesion restricts the score to Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with several instances of awkward phrasing and imprecise word choices, such as 'annual yield and profit' (which introduces outside economic speculation inappropriate for Task 1) and 'making it for useful'. The student successfully attempts some less common vocabulary items related to the prompt, such as 'redesigned', 'transform', and 'recycling bin', but spelling and word formation errors are noticeable ('out door'). Because the lexical range is limited and contains errors that cause some friction for the reader, a score of 5.0 is appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text is characterised by run-on sentences and a lack of proper punctuation and capitalisation (e.g., 'overall area increases...', 'bin ,toilet ,kitchen... remains'). There is a mixture of simple and attempted complex structures, but these frequently contain errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The two maps illustrates', 'bin... remains') and missing articles. Because errors are frequent and occasionally obscure the intended meaning, the response meets the descriptors for Band 5.0.
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