Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The maps illustrate changes to a remodel appearace of collage cafeteria before and in present time .
In past days , the view of cafe was uncomplicated like massive amount of space was occupied with dining chairs . Additionally , there were two rooms of wokers dining rooms . There were a kichen and in front of it a serving platform . Dustbin and restroom is also available .
Furthermore in contamprary time , there are many things are change . For instance the serving room change to hotmeals . Moreover , staff room modify with takeout food and coffee area . Additionally ,the barbecue and open air seating is also available . The kitchen room , toilets and bins are not transorm .
To concluid , before reshape cafe was basic interior and very few service were accessible . While in present many assencial places available and it look model and fancy .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The candidate attempts to describe the main changes shown in the maps, noting the transformation of the staff dining rooms, the kitchen serving area, and the addition of outdoor seating and a barbecue. However, the response lacks a proper overview and contains several inaccuracies in reporting the visual data; for example, the claim that the kitchen and toilets are 'not transform' contradicts the visual evidence showing changes to the serving counters and surrounding layout. Ideas are underdeveloped, and the word count barely crosses the minimum threshold. This performance aligns with Band 5, as it addresses the task only partially with limited and imprecise development of key features.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is organized into rudimentary paragraphs representing an introduction, body, and conclusion, but the logical progression is weak. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'In past days', 'Furthermore in contamprary time', and 'To concluid'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical transitions fail to create smooth flow between sentences. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within sentences is frequently disrupted by poor punctuation and awkward phrasing. This falls under the Band 4 descriptor, as information and ideas are not arranged coherently enough to ensure smooth progression.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Vocabulary usage is basic, repetitive, and heavily impacted by spelling and word-choice errors. The student makes frequent spelling mistakes such as 'appearace', 'collage', 'wokers', 'kichen', 'contamprary', 'hotmeals', 'transorm', 'concluid', 'reshape', and 'assencial'. While there is an attempt to use topic-related vocabulary like 'cafeteria', 'serving platform', and 'barbecue', the pervasive errors in spelling and morphology frequently strain the reader and obscure meaning. This corresponds to Band 4, where vocabulary is basic and errors repeatedly strain comprehension.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent basic errors. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, such as 'there are many things are change', 'the serving room change', and 'staff room modify'. Punctuation and word forms are also unreliable. Complex structures are either absent or faulty, and errors occur in almost every sentence, significantly impeding communication in places. This performance matches Band 4, characterised by frequent grammatical errors that distort meaning and limit structural variety.
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