Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The provided two maps illustrates how an area called college cafe demonstrated changes and was converted into a modernised one.
Overall, cafe was transformed into densely popular commercial area and the most significant changes were addition of outdoor seating and barbecue.
Despite enormous alterations in the area, the kitchen located in the top left side of the area, tables and chairs in the middle and toilets in the south-east part of the map were remained unchanged. However, serving area in the north-west part of the map was knocked down to make space to cook hot meals. Similarly, staff dining rooms in the middle were demolished and take away food and coffee bar were built in their place.
Furthermore, salad bar in the west part of the map was constructed. Bins in the east was transformed into recycling bins. Out of the cafe, outdoor seatings were eructed and barbecue in the south-west was built.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
Talaba asosiy xususiyatlarni muvaffaqiyatli aniqlaydi va kollej kafelining ikki rejasi o'rtasida tegishli taqqoslashlarni amalga oshiradi. Umumiy sharh ochiq havoda o'tirish joyi va barbekyu zonasining qo'shilishi kabi asosiy o'zgarishlarni qamrab oladi. Oshxona, stol va stullar, shuningdek, hojatxonalar kabi o'zgarmas asosiy xususiyatlar, xizmat ko'rsatish zonasining issiq ovqatlanish joyiga va xodimlar ovqatlanish xonalarining olib ketiladigan ovqat va kofe bariga aylantirilishi bilan birga qayd etilgan. Biroq, xodimlar ovqatlanish xonalarini shimoliy devor bo'ylab emas, balki o'rtaga joylashtirish kabi makoniy havolalarda kichik noaniqliklar mavjud. Ushbu kichik kamchiliklarga qaramay, topshiriqning barcha qismlari yetarli darajada bajarilgan bo'lib, Band 6.5 talablarini qondiradi.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
Javob aniq paragraflarga bo'lingan bo'lib, kirish va umumiy sharh bilan boshlanadi, undan keyin statik elementlar va tarkibiy o'zgarishlarni batafsil bayon etuvchi asosiy qism paragraflari keladi. O'quvchini yo'naltirish uchun 'Despite enormous alterations', 'However' va 'Furthermore' kabi bog'lovchi vositalardan foydalanilgan. Biroq, statik xususiyatlarni yangi qo'shimchalardan mantiqiyroq ajratish uchun paragraflarga bo'lish biroz yaxshiroq tuzilishi mumkin edi va ba'zi o'tishlar biroz mexanik tuyuladi. Shunga qaramay, umumiy tartib butun matn davomida aniq mantiqiy rivojlanish bilan izchil bo'lib, Band 6.5 ga loyiqdir.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Talaba 'modernised', 'knocked down', 'demolished', 'constructed' va 'transformed' kabi so'zlardan foydalangan holda jarayon yoki xaritani tasvirlash uchun mos keladigan yetarli darajada lug'at boyligini namoyish etadi. 'densely popular commercial area' va 'outdoor seatings were eructed' (ehtimol erected so'zining imlo xatosi) kabi ba'zi g'ayritabiiy birikmalar va so'z tanlash holatlari mavjud. Kamroq uchraydigan lug'atga urinishlar qilingan bo'lsa-da, so'z tanlash va imloda vaqti-vaqti bilan noaniqliklar saqlanib qolmoqda, bu esa ushbu natijani qat'iy ravishda Band 6 toifasiga joylashtiradi.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
Javob 'Despite enormous alterations in the area...' kabi kirish ergash gaplarni o'z ichiga olgan holda oddiy va murakkab gap tuzilmalarining aralashmasini o'z ichiga oladi. Grammatik nazorat odatda yaxshi, ammo tushirib qoldirilgan artikllar ('the cafe', 'bins in the east') va majhul nisbat muammolari ('remained unchanged' o'rniga 'were remained unchanged') kabi sezilarli xatolar mavjud. Bu xatolar muloqotga xalaqit bermaydi, lekin ballning Band 7 ga yetishiga to'sqinlik qiladigan darajada yetarli chastotada sodir bo'ladi.
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