Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The plans below show a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The plans underneath exhibit a college cafe before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
In summary, the cafe before redesign in before are changing is serving area (all food, drink) in now adays are hot meals. and the staff dining rooms are changing in take away food and coffee bar. the tables chair is beside the bin to change in recycling bins. and the now a days a new in table or chair suide the salaad bar and the4 salaad bar is infront of barbecue or outdoor seating.
In the explanation, the cafe before redesign in kitchen is northside top uper are kitchen and in front of serving area and the behind the staff dining rooms . the middle is situated in tables or chairs and werst side are bin . the south corner is situated are toilets.
nows a day cafe are some places are but some places are different . so the kitchen is situated are same place but the change the hot meals are new in now a days. and the side is situated are take away food or coffee bar . the centre are same as tables or chair .And the new are salad bar. the bin is chande in recycling bins and ythe toilets are same as now adays. but new places are barbecue or outdoor seating .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task by comparing the two plans of the college cafe. The student mentions several modifications, such as the change from staff dining rooms to a take away food and coffee bar section, the addition of a salad bar, and the introduction of outdoor seating and a barbecue. However, the communication of these features is severely hindered by severe linguistic breakdowns, making much of the text difficult to interpret. While the writer covers several main features, the lack of a clear, coherent overview and poor organisation place this performance at Band 4.0, as the ideas are minimally and disjointedely conveyed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
Coherence and cohesion are major weaknesses in this response. The essay lacks logical progression and clear paragraph structure. Instead of well-linked paragraphs, the text consists of fragmented sentences and repetitive phrasing such as 'in now adays' and 'is situated are'. Transitional devices are either missing or misused, resulting in a disjointed flow that forces the reader to struggle to follow the comparison. Pronoun referencing and overall text organisation fail to meet the requirements for Band 5, aligning the response with Band 4 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The lexical resource is very basic and repetitive. The student relies heavily on words directly copied from the prompt or visual data, such as 'cafe', 'kitchen', 'tables and chairs', and 'toilets'. There are frequent word-formation errors and inappropriate collocations throughout the text, including 'in before are changing' and 'suide the salaad bar'. The range of vocabulary is extremely limited and inadequate for an Academic Task 1 response, severely impeding meaning and restricting the score to a Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak. The response lacks complex structures and contains frequent, dense errors in basic sentence construction, word order, and verb tenses. Examples of severe grammatical faults include 'the cafe before redesign in before are changing is serving area' and 'nows a day cafe are some places are but some places are different'. Punctuation is haphazard, and there are almost no error-free sentences. These persistent errors cause continuous strain for the reader, fitting the Band 4.0 criteria.
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